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He Said, She Said |
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oceanvu2 Senior Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 1066Santa Monica, California, USA |
He Said, She Said, A Jape After William Wycherley: “Linda, Linda, full of life, Such a feckless, wanton wife! A'times I’ve had to weep at how You lightly break our marriage vows! Seducing men and women both, It puts a blight upon our troth. You act with such impunity, Indulgence, sensed immunity, As if the very gods somehow Appointed you their temporal cow.” “Before what judge or rustic deacon Did I aver these vows called broken? I’ve always been your country wife And lived a countrywoman’s life. You jack-a-napes, you too long tarried! We were never truly married! Not for better, not for worse, Surely not for wretched verse! Poet, not to you I look For comfort while your head’s abook!” [This message has been edited by oceanvu2 (06-21-2007 11:52 AM).] |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
laugh. SHE reminds me dearly of Chaucer's Wife of Bath, without the 5 husbands or money. The only line I'm wrestlin' a bit with is: S2L2 "Did I aver such vow oft broken?" Hmm..perhaps the syllables and context are throwing me. It's a delightful read from both perspectives, Jim, and that's not always easy to do and be believable. |
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oceanvu2 Senior Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 1066Santa Monica, California, USA |
Hi Regina! Glad you laughed! This was an attempt to write the best really bad verse I could mangle. Or, in the words of our esteemed Pipster, Huan Yi, "merely word play." And thanks, I changed the line per your suggestion.  Jim |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
very cool. smooth now. no manglin' here, just fun to read, which is the point of playin' with words. hehe. |
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Edward Grim Senior Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154Greenville, South Carolina |
HA! This is great Jimbeaux, a real tribute to traditional poetry. If Ess ever reads this, he'll see what I mean about the "in the right hands" thing I was talking about. My favorite line has to be: "Seducing men and women both," hahaha, genius. I shall defy the purpose of Critical Analysis and give you no critique. I woke up a rebel today... Plus there isn't anything to fix. “Well all the apostles, they’re sittin’ on the swings, sayin’ I’d sell off my savior for a set of new rings.” |
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JenniferMaxwell
since 2006-09-14
Posts 2423 |
You do expand our horizons in such amusing ways. |
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