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BigBlueLu New Member
since 2002-07-23
Posts 5 |
rain falls emotional floods red eyes, tired hearts signs blurred by love resentment, fear, nervousness head down in the sand hands high, yelling to sky another day passes by |
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MomentzBefore Junior Member
since 2002-07-22
Posts 31 |
Very deep feelings.... |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Hi Lu, Welcome to the forum. It's always good to hear a new voice. I hope you will enjoy it here. Check your email. Pete |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Though short this is filled with feeling. Enjoyed the read very much. |
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The Napkin Writer Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 70 |
Yes, I agree with WhiteRose. "So much said, in so few words" |
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Permiabilities Junior Member
since 2002-07-05
Posts 27 |
YES! WELCOME!! Hope to see you around the board. VNP by the way  |
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hush Senior Member
since 2001-05-27
Posts 1653Ohio, USA |
I think you have too many abstract ideas here, and need to delve more deeply into specifics. I suggest you read some of the posts here with extensive, interactive critiques... it'll give you some good ideas to start with. Hope I've helped. Who is John Galt? |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
BBLu, For a first post, I thought this was very good. You have imagery, emotion and something close to metaphor...all in a very few lines. Keep writing! Kris "It is wisdom to know others; |
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