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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
‘Is that whispering voices’? I held her trembling hand We had travelled far through this troubled land Our hearts were beating harder as we scurried through the corn My prayers began to aver we’d see another dawn We took the hedges cover upon the muddy bank I softly held my lover our silhouettes now shrank I quietly held her stare from eyes of misty Blue ‘I shouldn’t have a care to spend my life with you’ Her answer was so soft with gentle fingertips She quickly glanced aloft and placed them on my lips Her body warm and scented pressed against me now But then my heart was rented with death upon her brow I arose in writhing torment weeping to the sky Cursing at the ferment I wanted too …to die The agony so brutal was in my tortured state But my heart was crying futile my sobbing was to late I laid my darling down into the wispy grass As in my tears I drowned this feeling would not pass I arranged a crown of daises of loving workmanship I sobbed my dearest’ praises and kissed her on the lips This awful war had torn and ravaged through our land And where my love had been had snatched it from my hand I dream as I grow older in heaven… we will share And as my nights grow colder my love is waiting there. Jon Mewett |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Heartbreaking story...well done. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Fear and passion, two highly charged emotions, carry us through and pull us into every line of this poem. Well done, dear poet Liz |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I could feel the tension and see the fear and love in this heartbreaking story. This is excellent writing! |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Thanx everybody for your kind words. Jon |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Jon, You always weave a wonderful tale. I hope it is just a tale. It's heartbreaking, but lovely. ~Gene |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Chilling and thrilling!! Great story...hope it is just that.... Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Swåmp¤Faerÿie Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358Illinois |
A tragic tale Jon....i love your poems....you're one of my favorites for ingenious tales =] Lookig forward to more =] swamp And there she weaves by night and day, a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson |
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Sasikat Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 290St. Petersburg, FL |
Jon, This one is soooo sad, it certainly touched my emotions. I truly hope that this came from the mind's creation and not an actual experience. So beautifully written Sheila ...the earth and myself are of one mind. The measure of the land and the measure of our bodies are the same........... Joseph, Nez Perce Chief |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Yeah it's only my rambling imagination,but thanks for your concern,Gene,Swampie,ESP,and Sasikat. Everybody's comments are much appreciated. Thanx Jon |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Heartbreaking, indeed ..... "I arranged a crown of daisies of loving workmanship I sobbed my dearest' praises and kissed her on the lips " These words have formed an image that I won't soon forget .... Exquisite work , Jon |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Heartbreaking poem, Jon. Beautifully done! Denise |
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PrincessPoet Member
since 2000-04-15
Posts 133Long Beach, Calif. |
 So sad Jon, But, as always well versed very good rhyme scheme talented flow your poetry is a delight to read Run with this one  Your failures in life come from not realizing your nearness to success when you give up. -Yoruba Proverb Poetry & Friendship, PrincessPoet |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Thanks Pepper,Denise and Princess your comments are always welcome and gratefully recieved. Jon |
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John the cat Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 357England |
I don't know how I missed reading this earlier, but I'm so pleased it didn't escape completely. Jon, you are the master. May your roof never fall in and those beneath it never fall out. Irish proverb. |
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Wikket Member
since 2000-01-29
Posts 340Santa Clara, CA USA |
Oh Jon! So heartbreaking and gripping...I couldn't stop reading. Excellent Work! I applaude you. ~~Jamie   "I keep breaking all the promises That I keep making to myself You'd think by now that I'd be over this Instead I'm feeling sorry for myself So why does everything seem desperate now? I should be feeling so alive But it feels like something's missing Something's wrong somehow It feels like something deep inside has died..." --Stabbing Westward |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Hey Hey all this kindness makes you want to (((((((((SHAKE)))))))))):0) Thanx Jon |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
Jon - you've evoked a torrent of emotions with this beautifully written piece. You have a wonderful way of making the reader "feel". ...Give me the strength to walk the soft earth, a relative to all that is.... Black Eagle Oglala Sioux holy man |
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blackhalo Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 467Denver, CO |
Ok, am I the only one who can write about a terribly sad subject and NOT write it well?!? Just kidding! I love the poem, wonderful description of the tormenting horror of war, and losing the one you love. But remember-it gets better. I send you hope and fond wishes for a brighter tomorrow. Life defines no more than what it is you ask for. April 20, 2000 Alicia A. Renzelman |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Jon, This is fabulous, you have such a talent for the written word, and your imagination is too realistic. |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Thanx Dreamer as usual your very kind,got any more dreams going spare? Jon |
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breezeinnc Junior Member
since 2000-04-26
Posts 47USA |
tragic and heartfeeling very well written breezeinnc |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
!!!!!!!! Aah, Jon, how do u do it? ^_^ nah, this is great.. hehe, i missed it earlier, 'coz I haven't been here as much as I would have liked to lately.. but I wish I hadn't, 'coz there aren't enough compliments in the English language, so I would not repeat myself ! ^_^ Well done.. very sad.. Lynne |
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Kitty_Fett Junior Member
since 2000-03-02
Posts 35 |
Very touching, and unfortunatly true. I really like the words that you use in there. Kitty Fett |
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dreamer1775 Junior Member
since 2000-05-05
Posts 20florida |
very sad and very beuitful peom |
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