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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... 
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Discarded, No More Working on guys stuff tearing through garage. Frantic to find a bolt just the size needed. Went through the stashes secondary, hidden and back-up. Don't even want to go, advoiding weekend hardware store hell. Walking away sad and resigned when; Lo, what is this? There she lays, kinda funky could it be, are we saved? Partially hidden in weed mostly darkened by shadow Rust and grime encrusted exactly the bolt that is needed! How about that? quick dunk in oil buffed about the grinder wheel hallelujah! She is usefull again! Perhaps like life; I pause to reflect this simple bolt resurrection. Unused, discarded then found and used are we re-claimed with a job to do? bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
*claps* Wonderful.. MAY THE ROAD RISE TO MEET YOU, MAY THE WIND BE ALWAYS AT YOUR BACK MAY THE SUN SHINE UPON YOUR FACE THE RAINS FALL SOFT UPON YOUR FIELDS AND, UNTIL WE MEET AGAIN, MAY GOD HOLD YOU IN THE PALM OF HIS HAND Irish Blessing |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
This is rather wonderful,great analogy. Jon |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
thanks for the imput, although i felt this piece to be rather sub-standard, seems a bit hurried and contrived to me. But as they say one is generally one's harshest critic... i am heartened that y'all enjoyed it, thank you. bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
This is wonderful. You just went into automatic and not discarded. Great job. Alle |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
You are your biggest critique!! Although I think I prefer your poem that you got published. This one was very good too though! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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PrincessPoet Member
since 2000-04-15
Posts 133Long Beach, Calif. |
True to that saying, We are our biggest critque so I second ESP But, perfect, as you will  Your failures in life come from not realizing your nearness to success when you give up. -Yoruba Proverb Poetry & Friendship, PrincessPoet |
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