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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand ![]() |
Baby Moonlight, Filters through the curtains, Kissing her bedspread. Loving hands, Smooth a wrinkle from her sheets, Caress her tiny face. Her eyes are closed, A smile plays on her lips. She sleeps in silence, A tiny porcelain doll, Lying with her teddy bears. Any criticism is welcome too.. ^_^ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Babies are so precious. So is this poem! Denise |
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kaile![]() ![]()
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Smell so pure and fresh~ Blessed chuckle as you touch me~ I love you,baby! allow me to write this haiku for you ![]() this poem is excellent....i too love bables myself...little bundle of joy and innocence they are BTW,if you are still interested,pls refer to the post "A Tribute to passionate poets and a Cinquain challenge" looking 4ward to read your cinquain!! ![]() ![]() |
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twinsgd Member
since 2000-02-13
Posts 416Ontario,Canada |
Absolutely beautiful Lynne No criticism from here....I came to read what you wrote, and thank you for sharing your thoughts. Jack |
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PrincessPoet Member
since 2000-04-15
Posts 133Long Beach, Calif. |
It's BABY FRESH, Nice Poem ![]() Your failures in life come from not realizing your nearness to success when you give up. -Yoruba Proverb Poetry & Friendship, PrincessPoet |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Very nice poem I enjoyed it also ![]() In case you are not aware we have a Critical Analysis forum if you feel you want to have advise, people go there that know how to critic a poem, and people post there who desire to have their poems criticed. ![]() |
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