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Wendy Flora Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 182Virginia |
Alone in a corner, a woman weeps. In her hands are a needle, thread, and fabric. She weaves her strings so tightly that they seem as one. Her tears fall silently as petals form, looking so real That one almost forgets their origin. One. . . two. . . three. . . and more. They fall to the floor silently, one by one, Both flowers and tears. At length, she gathers them in her arms, and for a Moment only she seems as a young girl come From the meadow - resembling a younger picture On the mantle. Then she is once more old, attaching The flowers to a long, white dress Beaded, with a train. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wendy this is so beautifully touching! Well done!  Denise And slight is the sting of his trouble Whose winnings are less than his worth; For he who is honest is noble, Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~ |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
Beautiful, Wendy! Of course, it doesn't rhyme, but since (thank God) there are NO RULES to writing poetry, it doesn't matter in the least Thanks for teaching me to smile! "They say that poetry can be a window to the past...or future. I had no idea how right they were. Stupid prophecies--" -Sam Dragon Part 5, 'Cannington Ravine' "The Artisan's Gate" "Weird?! No, 'weird' is when you apply your human rules to where they shouldn't be applied. That's why it seems strange to you." --Ttark |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Wendy, You've told of a woman past, present and future in this short verse. It is wonderful! Liz |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
I'd like to think that when I'm an old woman I can look and see myself young again, but of course only for a moment in time, then I'd have to go back again. Just like in this poem. JOY |
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Majestic Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 264houston, tx. |
Ohhhh. great poem Wendy... If one wishes to be young again...Fall in Love...It is Ageless. |
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FreeByrd Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 267 |
Nice visual Wendy. I've read a couple of different themes into this wonderful piece. One of a lonely seamstress who has probably made hundreds of wedding dresses and not one for herself. The one I prefer to believe is that she is attaching those hand made flowers to her daughters wedding dress. What's wonderful about it is that it drew me in, made me think about the character and feel the emotions behind whatever my interpretation was. Excellent work Wen. There must be some kinda way out of here... say the joker to the thief There's to much confusion, I can't get no relief - Hendrix |
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Wendy Flora Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 182Virginia |
 I originally wrote it with the second theme in mind. That makes me feel so good! (I was worried for a while that I'd made it too ambiguous or something...) -wen |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
I ditto all of the above Wendy. Thye all said it so well. Very well done. : ) |
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Wendy Flora Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 182Virginia |
I wrote this one a long time ago and I dug it out because only one or two people have ever seen it, and I was thinking about sending it out to get published. Thank you all for the encouragement! (p.s. if you have any suggestions for improvement before I send it off, I would welcome them.) -wen |
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FreeByrd Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 267 |
Wen, Not that I claim to know anything about publishing, but I know that with my own work, the first cut is the best. When you start to think it's not good enough and you have to make changes, It's doomed. Best Wishes to you. Your Best is yet to come. |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
Wow! |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Brilliant!!! This is everything that everyone else has already said it is! I can't think of anything to add other than I wish you the best of luck in getting it published!! Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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