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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas 
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I feel like... Wine and red roses sensuous and sexy When you look at me with those brilliant blue eyes That hold an ocean of emotion in their sparkling depth Eyes that I could drown in and never think to struggle for air Eyes that capture and mesmerize and hold me in their grasp powerless to let go a willing prisoner Just from a look in your eyes ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~ |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
Mesmerizing poem Starr. "I feel like... wine and red roses" This is beautiful. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This gave me goosebumps!  |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
Mmm...make that dragon bumps, PdV! Only some of the best can put that much feeling into so few words...incredible job, Starr!  "Wine and red roses"... Little Spyro T. Dragon Wish I had some wine, but I heard it tastes kinda bitter... |
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Another Heather Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 93Canada |
Wow, this was great! So beautifully expressed in so few words. I lokk forward to reading more. "Be yourself... No matter what they say" - Sting |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautiful indeed!  Denise |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
What eyes that must be ! Wonderful poem |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
Thank you all for your kind replys this was actually my first attempt at free verse (someone told me poems don't always have to rhyme lol) so I tried it and stored it away in my little notebook and the other day I was looking through it trying to find something that didn't have a depressing undertone to it and presto there it was Glad you all liked it ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~ |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
What? This is free verse? Wait a minute, lemme read it again. Oh, yeah, it is. Well, when you read a poem and don't realize it doesn't rhyme, then it's damn good! I did find one place were it rhymes, though--it's tuff not to, isn't it?  ~Gene |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
I did find one place were it rhymes, though--it's tuff not to, isn't it? Gene...Shhhhhh!!! what rhyme? I don't see any rhymes (LMAO) ok ok so maybe two little words kind of have the same ending sound ...yeah it is hard but I'm practicing I'll get it down ~*Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear*~ |
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