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shadydaze
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0 posted 2001-04-18 01:46 PM


you know, it's a bother to write this.
it's hard now even to think.
it's not too much fun,
quite hard to be done:
expressing myself in ink.

perhaps if i had some pencils,
i could draw a picture for you.
a picture's worth
a thousand words.
but that's something i just can't do.

so, since i can color no portrait
(the likes that your eyes can see),
i'll write a few words,
but a thousands obsurd!
so, would you settle for eighty-three?


( to those who would argue that this poem has eighty-four words: eighty-three is a compound word.)

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Joyce Johnson
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1 posted 2001-04-18 02:33 PM


This is darling.  Joyce
Panne447
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2 posted 2001-04-18 03:03 PM


Shady- this is terrific- we have all been there a few times - 83 vs 84 - what the heck is a compound word? And i never counted as I took your word for it.lol Panne
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3 posted 2001-04-18 05:50 PM


This is a cute poem and I enjoyed reading it.

Betty Lou Hebert

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4 posted 2001-04-19 06:47 AM


the title pulled me in and i just want to say that i have felt the very same sentiments often....sigh
Songbird
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5 posted 2001-04-19 12:27 PM


Very clever poem, I enjoyed reading it and I will take your word to as the number of words in it..!!
Wobbly Head Bob
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6 posted 2001-04-19 03:06 PM


Alright!  Hehe, scheme and cleverness!  Who can top that?!  Great read!
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7 posted 2001-04-19 04:47 PM


Haha this was great!!!! I really enjoyed this. Made me smile.

ellie LeJeune
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8 posted 2001-04-19 06:01 PM


what a whimsical and wonderfully creative poem!  Ellie

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

Suzanne Arlene
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9 posted 2001-04-19 08:38 PM


Now that was a cute poem  Job well done
Suzanne

Packratmike
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10 posted 2001-04-22 02:04 PM


Very cute poem.  This style wraps my heart up into a cute little bundle of warm.*S*
Thank you.

Mike

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