»
Archives
»
The Corner Pub
»
a pattern
| The Corner Pub |
|
a pattern |
|
|
wordancer Senior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 809VA 
|
see the pattern in the lines of the palm in your hand, trace the branches in the humanity of man the swirls and whorls at your fingertips impressed against the pane of life forevermore no two alike rest your cold hands against the glass look endlessly into a distant mist see the shadow in timeless past who reflects back with brooding eyes to peer in wonderment through the pane as patterns of mankind merge at last -wordancer * laryalee, thanks for the inspiration "Come...dance with me, into my world of words." [This message has been edited by wordancer (edited 02-08-2001).] |
||
| © Copyright 2001 Beverly A. Tift - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
laryalee Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 352Alberta, Canada |
Wordancer, what an excellent picture! "the swirls and whorls at your fingertips impressed against the pane of life" and then the shadow of the past looking in... great imagery! A joy to read... Lary |
||
|
wordancer Senior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 809VA |
"and then the shadow of the past looking in..." ...is it the shadow of the past looking in, the dancer inquires gently... |
||
|
Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
very cool....i liked your ideas and the way you put them into words!! swamp Do i contradict myself?Very well i contradict myself.I contain multitudes.~walt whitman |
||
|
laryalee Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 352Alberta, Canada |
Okay, I wasn't really thinking 'shadow of the past' meaning 'our past'...but the entire past which would in effect be the Past (therefore past, present, future - the All)...yes, I sense the Presence ....should be more careful in my word selection *g* Lary |
||
|
wordancer Senior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 809VA |
laryalee, lets see if I can explain myself. Yes, you are right about it being the shadow of the entire past. I was questioning about “who” was doing the actual looking in. Read the last stanza as if it stands alone and not connected to the third. I deliberately broke this into 4 stanzas instead of 2, like I first had it, just for this reason, when I saw what I had. Put the implied question mark at the end of the first line. who reflects back with brooding eyes? That changes it…and makes it very ambiguous about who is looking in, don’t you think?  WO [This message has been edited by wordancer (edited 02-08-2001).] |
||
|
pegasus111 Member Elite
since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219ocala, fl, usa |
the past is a photograph. immobile. it's song is irrefutable. it is always there. the future is a foggy mist. inscrutable. elusive. it has no song or substance. the present is caught between the past and the future. it is a shape changer. pulled and pushed by events. drawn by the past yet yanked into the future. it has many songs. sometimes it is silent.............. the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost |
||
|
kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
This dropped off too fast. I was still thinking about it, and it was gone. It's not a read one time and react kind of thing. I have often thought about how the past, specifically my ancestors, may have influenced my life. What traits do I carry from that mixed group of men and women, and how have their decisions influenced where I am and what I have I become? And if we believe that there is life after this one (as I surely do), might they not be looking back at us through that pane, to see what we are doing with what they left us?  As for Pegasus and his comments about the future, that's too much for my feeble brain to handle right now. It makes my head spin.  This is a good thoughtful read, and will go in my library for further pondering.To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
||
|
wordancer Senior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 809VA |
Poor grandma, didn't mean to make your head spin....let you in on a secret...I'm still thinking about this one too.  WO |
||
|
ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Wordancer; I am enthralled with this deep and thoughtfully written poem. I love how you all have come to your own conclusions and interpretations. Mine might seem too simple, but to me all exists in the present moment, it took me many years to discover that staying in the moment is the only reality. It is, to me, where the light is. A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails. |
||
|
wordancer Senior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 809VA |
Ellie, I still find it amazing that people see so many interpretations in some of words I write. But, then again, not really. We all have different thoughts, and experiences that come to mind when we read a poem. It this connection that allows different interpretations. Sometime by othesr comments, I revise what I wrote…either going more with their thoughts, because it intrigues me. Or to make mine direction of the poem clearer. But its looks like this one, methinks I’m going to leave well enough alone for now. Now truthfully I didn’t know where this was going, when I took off on laryalee’s pattern poem, which reminded me of a poem of my mine that has the image of “lines in the palm of your hand”. Then I was thinking how that these lines and our finger prints directly connect us back to the first ancient men in the far past. And who would be the most amazed, them looking forward in at us, or us looking in back at them? I do love using window panes, mirrors and other reflections to looked closely at something. Can’t decide if my “pane” and “glass” is a window or perhaps a mirror and the one peering thoughtfully in, is ourselves at ourselves, the sum total of all the world generations. So I’m definitely not finish with this one…yet. WO |
||
|
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You have the gift of a true poet....not one person sees your writing as another...well done! |
||
|
wordancer Senior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 809VA |
Sunshine, what a lovely comment, thank-you very much! WO |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
