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Munda
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0 posted 2001-01-19 11:48 AM



Orchestra performs
Yet a sole violin plays
My life's symphony

~~~~~

A single true tear
In the corner of my eye
Purifying rain

~~~~~

Fragile seed planted
In the garden of my heart
A crack in the wall

~~~~~

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Dopey Dope
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1 posted 2001-01-19 02:49 PM


wow, i liked them a lot!!
Very nice!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Gene
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2 posted 2001-01-19 06:41 PM


Very lovely, Munda.    You should write mor Haiku, you're great at it.

Gene

kcsgrandma
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3 posted 2001-01-19 06:54 PM


Orchestra performs
Yet a sole violin plays
My life's symphony

I liked all of these, Munda, but this is my favorite.  It is something to think about - What instrument would be playing my song?   Thanks for something to mull on for a while.

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

William P Bussey
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4 posted 2001-01-19 07:12 PM


You say a lot in such few words, and they all are so real and intense. I don't think I have every read this type before, maybe I will try it myself.
Dennis L. White
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5 posted 2001-01-19 08:08 PM


Munda, Tankas? no....tankas are 5-7-5-7-7
Beautiful haikus? YES! you're a natural!
I liked the ALL!
Dennis :^)

Moonbeams radiate
When the veiling cloud has passed
Playful shadows dance

Dennis L. White :^)



Denise
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6 posted 2001-01-19 08:43 PM


Tanka you, tanka you, for these beautiful haiku..or is that haikus? Lovely, Munda!

Denise

allan
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7 posted 2001-01-20 10:03 AM


Count me in on the complements - beautiful work!


Moon Dust
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8 posted 2001-01-20 10:08 AM


These are good I have to agree with the others

Life has got to chnage,
Nothing stays the same,
Soon it will be time,
For me to move on.


kaile
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9 posted 2001-01-24 05:15 AM


i ditto kcs, your first senryu really caught my attention...i found myself wondering that perhaps no instrument would play my life's symphony since i am not musically inclined...

great work

Munda
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10 posted 2001-01-24 12:47 PM


Thank you all very muchly from the Dutchie. : D And thank YOU Dennis and Gene for refreshing my mind.  
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