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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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God’s Creatures We must respect all living things Of God’s creation here on earth For every creature has a purpose And a true intrinsic worth I always felt that I would honor Even those that cannot think Until I found a huge night crawler Lying ‘cross my kitchen sink Placed there by a five year old Collecting bait for fishing day It caused my vocal chords to make A sound that echoes to this day I do respect all living things From slimy snake to furry mouse But I cannot abide these creepy Crawly creatures in my house I marvel at a spider’s web A splendor spun of God’s own pride As long as that magnificence Is on the window’s other side A cat or dog who wonders in Is placed with care across the fence But crawly bugs are killed on sight In terror and in self defense A bug who enters my domain Is doomed to death by weight of shoe I ask that God forgive me for These acts of vengeance that I do I do respect all living creatures All have purpose, all have weight Until they come into my house And meet their final tragic fate Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 03-03-2000).] |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Elizabeth, what beautiful prose! I marvel at a spiders'web, A splender spun of God's own pride Wonderful, simply Wonderful! I am delighted by your vision and your mirth! Dennis :^) |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
Elizabeth this poem is so cool! By the second verse there was a giggle building in my belly. By the third verse I was laughing out loud. Your words flow smoothly and the topic was one we definitely all can relate to. I absolutely love this!!! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Delightful, Elizabeth! Yep, I, too, can relate to this one!! They all have a right to live until the come into my domain!! I love your sense of humor, Elizabeth! It is refreshing!! Denise |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
LOL Liz! I agree with the others, this is GREAT!  I like your sense of humor too and bugs tend to creep me out...of course, it's easily taken care of "in a flash" [of fi'ry light]...  Wonderful descriptive phrases of the bugs and other animals! I just hope you don't kill dragons on site... Little Spyro T. Dragon |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz, this is adorable! |
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bboog Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303Valencia, California |
Liz- Oh, oh, here I go again. I liked everything about this poem except for two lines: It caused my vocal chords to make A sound that’s heard until this day It didn't seem to flow that well. Now I'm not the greatest at rhyming poems, but I think you might consider something like: "It made me jump and give a scream Twas' heard three counties away." Again, I liked this poem and suggest you send it out to a fishing magazine. The editors would probably get a chuckle. best regards, bboog |
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William P Bussey Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 188 |
True true, my feelings exactly. only I feel that way about a lot of things, some people included, bill |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thanks everyone for your comments on this poetic masterpiece. BBoog, you are right. I didn't like that line either so I made a change. I liked your suggestion, But "Twas heard three counties away" would be out of meter with the rest of the poem. Thanks. Liz |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Tooo cute Liz ... I'm not bothered by those little squirmies 'cause I have the best bug man around LOL This piece is delightful !!! [This message has been edited by Pepper (edited 03-04-2000).] |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Lol....Liz, this poem had me in stitches!! I think that many people share your view!! Your words continue giving me much pleasure. Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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John the cat Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 357England |
LOL....I'm with you on this one Liz. Wonderful. May your roof never fall in and those beneath it never fall out. Irish proverb. |
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