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the devil laughed.. |
dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
wrote this for a friend..not for me.. ............................. i heard a scream that early morn while the devil laughed with glee i couldn't be quite certain but i think he was laughing at me... i found i lost a game today the world turned fast as my head spun i didnt realize i was playing-- thats how the devil won and now i embace this twisted truth alone in my empty soul i couldnt know this feeling until the life he stole i have no place to rest dark blame only this piercing ache corroding the blessed core of me causing my heart to shake rockabye my empty arms my soft and innocent ghost a piece of me lay rest with the morn the devil's song, composed... -dgvarner < !signature--> "so lift your heart with mine...the depth to which it grieves is the height to which it can celebrate!" -Lisa Hussey [This message has been edited by dgvarner (edited 11-17-2000).] |
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pegasus111 Member Elite
since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219ocala, fl, usa |
I'm glad this isn't you DG..It would make me sad..this has a nice flow. bet there is a story your're not telling us. the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
Heartbreaking.........facing self guilt has to be one of the hardest things of all......Really nice job on this. To capture and live a moment is truly living |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
dg- oh wow! this gave me chills...still recovering as i try to type this. this is filled with such deep pain... i felt every word, and it brought tears to my eyes...my heart goes out to who ever this is for... 'rockabye my empty arms my soft and innocent ghost a piece of me lay rest with the morn the devil's song, composed...' i just can't even find the words for this one...so...WOW! love and huge hugs, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
Wow again, dg! The emptiness and despair is so vivid here! It makes me think of the emptiness I felt when I had a miscarriage. I'm also glad it is not you, and hope your friend finds the way out of this black pit soon. hugs for being so caring!< !signature--> To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn [This message has been edited by kcsgrandma (edited 11-17-2000).] |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
DG; Beautifully written and so dark, may this soul find his way to the light, I pray. Love, Ellie Belief is a truth held in the mind; faith is a fire in the heart. Joseph Fort Newton |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
DgV, What came to mind was that your friend had an abortion before considering the ramifications or her actions, now she bares the guilt of this decision. Only a feeling! Powerfully written poem with such sadness. Dennis :^) Moonbeams radiate When the veiling cloud has passed Playful shadows dance Dennis L. White :^) |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
brr-r-r...c-c-COLD... *breathes fire on his own scales to warm himself up* there, that's better... But they're right--there's something you're not telling us! This poem has to have some basis...so what is it?? Yeah, a nice flow...and very, very haunting, if you ask me...brrr-r-r... but no less of a great work. Little Spyro T. Dragon Watching the poets Passions' guardian dragon Moves with the rhymes' flow. Though my body be Human, my heart and soul be That of a dragon. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Dee, this is sooooo amazingly brilliant, as all yours are. This is full of the cold and the self blame, and I'm so glad this isn't you. You are such a superb, talented, and astoundingly wonderful writer. (Was that enough superlatives for you, and if it wasn't blame Ethome, he's nicked all the best ones. It's all right I'll get them back. I just need to arrange a trade that's all.) I love this one Dee I really do, you've put it together so well. Take care Bubbles (I wonder if I can trade some old poetry for them, I'll use yours, mines no good. You wouldn't mind would you. ) Speak to you soon Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
peg, dreamkeeper, tricks, mar, eL, den, spryo, bubbles....i wont thank you all personally, because i'm not sure what to say actually..i feel this one deep..even tho it is for a close friend as apposed to my own experience..all your comments mean so much to me, as always, but especially on this one..and i posted it here, because of how personal it feels..i knew i wanted it to be 'home' in the pub..not in the quick open forum where things get passed by and passed on so quickly.. thank you all again..for your attention and your kind words means much! hugs, gale |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
dg, then im glad i came "home" in time to read this piece my breath caught at these lines: i didnt realise i was playing-- thats how the devil won how helpless your friend must be!! Hugs to you and your friend and i hope she will emerge from her dark pit soon.... |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
kaile..i thank you friend poet its that last stanza that got me..as i was writing it.. hugs, g "so lift your heart with mine...the depth to which it grieves is the height to which it can celebrate!" -Lisa Hussey |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Sometimes.....like you DGV.....I write a poem that sort of shakes me up a bit......and I think whoa where did that come from?.........I feel this is one of them.....for you .....the wages of thought I spose........like it Jon |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
thanks jon..and youre right; the situation is kind of close to my heart..and shake me it did... hugs,dgv |
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