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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
I'm sorry guys, another repost (a pantoum), but I wanted to share this one with my friends at the Pub. I wonder if it gives you the same feeling as it gives me and still does.  It was such a sweet caress On that weary dreary day Longing for my bonnie lass Solemn grief ate me away On that weary dreary day Death came passing by my door Solemn grief ate me away Heartache mine forevermore Death came passing by my door Looking at my soppy eyes Heartache mine forever more Bonnie lass she just had died Looking at my soppy eyes Feeling sorry in a way Bonnie lass she just had died Said "this is your lucky day" Feeling sorry in a way Her kiss cold yet sweet to me Said "this is your lucky day" Your sweet bonnie lass you’ll see Her kiss cold yet sweet to me Longing for my bonnie lass Your sweet bonnie lass you’ll see It was such a sweet caress Munda |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
I don't know how it makes you feel but it makes me weepy. Sad yet happy too for "your sweet bonnie lass you'll see".  |
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deleeme Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766NEW ENGLAND, USA |
Munda, I enjoyed the read It seemed real classy Tho maybe not my speed- Nor like some of yours so sassy. But it was entertaining Tho' a bit sad-by death's strong hand, Yet with the sense of love remaining Overcoming life's ultimate demand! Munda you did real good! David |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Munda, this is SUPERB..I'm so glad you did share it here with us...very nice work take care, janet marie She says baby, It's 3am I must be lonely, When she says baby, Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes, Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it. Matchbox20 I love you baby... always.* |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
childomine - David - Janet, thank you so much for your replies. Maybe I should explain first how this feels to me To me this poem feels sad for the loss of a true love and yet very happy to be given the oppertunity to follow even in death. In this poem Death feels as a sweet caress to me. Sounds weird ? LOL Maybe that's because I am a little weird  Thank you for your kind words. |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
What more can I add to the replies here? They've said it all...except that this is "really really REALLY good"! lol Great job on this Munda! I'm glad you reposted it here! Little Spyro T. Dragon |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I like this as much as the first time I read it! Very good, Munda!! Denise |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Thank you Sam. What would I do without your replies. Denise, thank you for your always kind words. Much appreciated. |
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Nurse Crachet Member
since 1999-09-27
Posts 318They know where I am! |
This was interesting, I enjoyed it's depth, where's some more for our eyes? |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Oh Munda .... a very emotional and beautifully written piece .... Sweetly sad ....... A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Munda, I works for me. Very sweet and beautifully written. Thanks for all the hugs. A Great Big Hug from me, ~Gene |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Nurse C. - In time, in time  Pepper - Always an honour to have your name in the replies Glad you liked it. Thank you.Gene - Thanks for that big hug....it felt good ! Thanks for stopping by  |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Munda...I know this name could not have stemmed from Mundane, for the art of your writing is anything but. Thank you for reposting this pantoum...I know how hard they are to write sometimes. And it tickled me to no end to walk in the Pub and see a goodly chunk of what I've posted here brought to the top. Well, here's a self-indulgent challenge for ya...see how many you can find in all the poetry forums, including the archives. After that exhaustive search, let me know if I still have a lack of posting.  Alicat the cackling Persnikitty As I sit here dimly thinking Watching modem lights a-blinking Churning out poetic hash. Lord, in all Your piety, Help me keep my sanity: Please don't let the modem crash! --Alicat |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Oh no Alicat, what did you do? You've gone and challenged Munda, she nevers steps down from a challenge, be ready to see your name in lights. Munda Nice poem here, I agree with the Nurse though we need more. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Okay.....I made a mess of the Pub and open 6 ! Got them all in open 5 - 4 - 3 - 2 - and have 9 to go in open 1. I found 2 in Spiritual, 1 in Prose, 9 in Dark ( did only 2 there) and 1 in the Workshop. I didn't bring them all back up in the smaller Forums, as I do not think that's the right thing to do All and all around 90 poems BUT....that's old ! How about 90 new ones this year ? LOLOK, I dare you to contact me on ICQ.....do I have a challenge for you Sir !!! Happy now I declare today, March 5 2000, Universal Alicat Day !..............Purrrrrrr my friends. He wrote some purrrrrrrrfect poetry ! Munda |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
LOL Now that's done and while waiting to see if my challenge will be accepted, I can finally thank you Gloria. As for new work, it may take a while, as I'm very busy lately. but I shall try ! And thank you for not holding me back, I need to go crazy like this now and then Ah, that feels good !Alicat, I think you'll be the most read poet of the day LOL Gee, will your email be full of notificactions....he he he.... |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
ROFLMAO!!! Oh Munda, so far from Mundane, you definately made my night. The challenge was complete...except for a couple you couldn't have known about...before I became Alicat, I went by Alastiar. *heheh also found 6 in Adult*Geeze..90 new ones? OK...give me a couple of days. Alicat the overawed Persnikitty [This message has been edited by Alicat (edited 03-05-2000).] |
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Sasikat Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 290St. Petersburg, FL |
Munda, This poem really tugged at my heartstrings as I too lost a love to death. How much I was able to relate to it and your meaning of death. Beautiful. Sheila |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
oh, i think this is even better for this tells such a sweet heart-wrenching story.... i agree with the rest...do write more pantoums for us |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Munda, No need to apologize for reposting this gem,(maybe you should apologize for not reposting it sooner, LOL). This is a sweet and haunting work, Read it once and I will never forget it! LOVE surpasses even the boundries of death. This is great! MUNDA,YOU RULE!!! It sure is good to see you back in the Pub! Dennis :^) |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
uh..jeez..after reading all the comments, i fear i've forgotten what i was going to say, myself! i like it, i like it! its a tough thing to lose the one you love to death..so final..and yet--maybe not....? share with me..whats a pantoum?? (i'm learning all the technical side of poetry while in the pub!) "A Poet's life is on written page; a scenario to take the stage--watch..." dgvarner |
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