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rich-pa Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 317New Orleans, Louisiana |
it flittered from the pine to it's new perch, one of the earth's prosthetic limbs, a shaft of steel and light and it stood like a monarch elegantly head held high silhoutted against azure fields filled with fluffy white flowers seemingly looking over it's territory -keeping an eye on it's little fench friends who hopped about playfully avoiding oblivious feet and speeding cars- then came the enemy riding on midnight wings. and the call was sounded and the pilots ready pitting theirselves in a minaiture dogfight little grey birds outnumbering their large black enemy, a dart- a peck- deathdefying tumbles and rolls, negative g's, inverted arcs, an ageless battle for the skies the little ones unrelenting in their attack until they reclaimed those azure fields. and that one -i believe it was that one- gracefully returned to it's perch as if nothing had happened. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
wow you drew such a vivid and detailed description with your words here... excellent imagery. creative place to find your inspiration. great job! janet marie ...there are places inside all our souls... that have never been touched... there are places inside our hearts... that need to be loved this much... Janet Marie *I miss you baby... I love you, always.* |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
Very vivid imagery!! My heart was racing as the attack took place!! Well written!!! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is wonderful, Rich! Beautiful imagery! I could see the scene in my mind!  Denise |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
I liked this. Your descriptions are really good in this poem. I liked your ending the best. "and that one -I believe it was that one- gracefully returned to its perch as if nothing had happened."  Joy |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
Beautiful, rich-pa! It felt like I was going through the trees like you described...beautiful imagery here! Excellent job! Little Spyro T. Dragon |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Great poem! I love the tweeties, I always feed them and watch them out the window  .~X~ Vivian Greene ~It is not our circumstances that create our discontent or contentment. It is us.~ |
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