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dreamer2524
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since 2000-09-08
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florida

0 posted 2000-09-09 12:30 PM


as midnight cloak,
begins to cover the evening sky.
i sit in silence,
as the wind dances around me.
the wind so light of her feet,
tell me of a message,
from a one true love.
the wind softly walks over,
as she bends down to kiss my check,
i hear you speak.
so clear,
so true,
so filled with hope,
and love.
as the wind dances around me,
engulfing me with your words,
i smile,
as i see you softly speak them.
as midnight cloak has covered the evening sky,
the winds dance has ended,
i sit in silence holding onto the message,
hold it dear to my heart,
in the silence of the cloak.


till the last beat of my heart i will always be with you.....kayte

© Copyright 2000 kayte - All Rights Reserved
gofor42
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since 2000-01-23
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1 posted 2000-09-09 02:23 PM


I must admit, I like the idea of the wind dancing.

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Denise
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2 posted 2000-09-09 02:29 PM


Me too! Say, maybe that would make a great title too!  

Denise

dreamer2524
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since 2000-09-08
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florida
3 posted 2000-09-09 04:42 PM


wind dancing that does sound like a cool name for the poem.
glad you both liked it.

till the last beat of my heart i will always be with you.....kayte

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4 posted 2000-09-09 08:07 PM


Dreamer~
I liked the entire way this poem moved -
so lightly blown about the page.

'i sit in silence,
as the wind dances around me.
the wind so light of her feet'


I favor a little different take on the title -
'Wind Softly Walks'

~*Marge*~



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