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Joannak Member
since 2000-03-11
Posts 121Indiana, USA |
Gently falling rain lightly moistening my hair, eyes already wet. jk What better way to become immortal than to wake up each day and write? Ray Bradbury |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Joannak, So sad soft and sweet..... |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Joanna, Yes a sad one, yet richly descriptive! Dennis :^) Moonbeams radiate When the veiling cloud has past Playful shadows dance Dennis L. White :^) |
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pegasus111 Member Elite
since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219ocala, fl, usa |
lovely..how about "Droplets" as a title? the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Joannak, this is lovely, soft, serene and sad. I like Pegasus' suggestion for the title  Well Done! |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
ah for some reason i only like to cry when it rains. Sad but bueatiful "Those who will not learn to use this instrument well cannot be saved by an expanded alphabet; they will only afflict us with expanded gibberish" ~ |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Joannak,i like the powerful ending that jolts this reader a little |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Joanna~ I liked the image this evoked. May I suggest 'Sprinkled' ... ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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allan Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620On the road |
'Liked this very much, soft and gentle feel... |
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Joannak Member
since 2000-03-11
Posts 121Indiana, USA |
Thank you all for your comments. In honor of both Pegasus and Marge, I submit for your approval.... Sprinkled Droplets ? What better way to become immortal than to wake up each day and write? Ray Bradbury |
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