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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland 
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THanks to Lost Dreamer for donating the opening line to this poem, and allowing me to run wild. =================================================== The eternal dance. Stringing songs rhythm beyond your smiling face, The band plays on, lush melodies are sung shimmering in the light of your eyes and angelic grace. We have danced for an eternity yet our love has just begun to flower and blossom in innocence and intent. We are old souls, born of a lost century, A thousand dated memories erupt in your scent Carrying away from the shell of frail humanity. We have witnessed the wars and conflict personal and global we were all refugees fleeing the betrayal of country and friends, in derelict housing I first kissed you in rain soaked miseries, They have erected our tombs and opened the grave, written the sermon and the quixotic eulogy, watching us wither as life and memory begins to fade, but I tell them save your silly sympathy. I am redundant, as are you my dear, to their world We have been written out and out of importance. Still they do not see us by the fire naked curled in our youth, first touch created our eternal romance. Oh we struck and fell beating a path through heaven and hell, But in essence we still continue lost in our everlasting dance, Finally the music stops, silence, except for last tolled bell, I fall upon you, breaking into dust, so it ends we have had our chance. "I concede relationships have left me weak Won't be here so I don't care Look for something worthy to replace my guilt" Mansun legacy |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I like how you run wild, Brian! Beautifully written! Denise |
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pegasus111 Member Elite
since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219ocala, fl, usa |
mesmerizing.. the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
i'll start by saying that lost dreamer came up with a great first line...and what you did with this glimmer of inspiration is nothing short of amazing!...but there was a word there i had to pull out the dictionary for...*smile* ~Dawn whatcha doing in this darkness baby when you know love will set you free? will you stay in the sea forever Drowning there for all eternity? ~Live |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Brian, What can I say that I have not said many times before. You asked me for a line to inspire your muse, as you hoped a poem would follow. What a fabulous poem you created from the line I gave you. I had no doubt in my mind, I knew a masterpiece you would create. I'll give you lines anytime to go wild with if it will motivate you to write with such supreme intellect. |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
We are old souls, born of a lost century, A thousand dated memories erupt in your scent I agree with Lost Dreamer you have a very high level intellect and your poems always make one think.... so many good lines you penned..love it all ~~softly Maureen |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Phew, I am just floored by these responses, I don't even know what to say without sounding arrogant or inflating my ego even more.... except thank you from the bottom of my heart, these words mean such much..god..try to remain humble, secretly very thrilled to see the "supreme intelluct" comment, even if it is no way true. Special thanks to LOst dreamer without whom this poem would not have been possible, thank you for the great lines and inspiration. "I concede relationships have left me weak Won't be here so I don't care Look for something worthy to replace my guilt" Mansun legacy |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
..I thoroughly enjoyed this read, and agreeing with those afore me...wonderfully written. Marcy |
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