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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Whirls of white Circle round like wreaths Floating upward On the slightest breeze In hypnotizing deceit Their strong enticing Aromas Penetrate Deep Elusively Quietly Unseen Poisoning Sucking Energy From Their Host Until The Breath Of Life Itself Has No Room To Live |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
septsong, ...this is excellent..vivid and sharp in its imagery... "On the slightest breeze In hypnotizing deceit"... I love that line... great work!! take care, janet marie Now for me some words come easy... But I know that they don't mean that much Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch. You never knew what I loved in you-- I don't know what you loved in me... Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be... How long have I been sleeping- How long have I been drifting alone through the night... How long have I've dreaming I could make it right... If I closed my eyes and tried with all my might To be the one you need... Jackson Browne |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Leaves me breathless....well done ! |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
 Does anyone know what I am talking about here? I was just wondering? |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
You got me there. I could think of a number of things, but every time it wouldn't fit into the "total" of the poem. Care to tell me ?  |
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Sasikat Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 290St. Petersburg, FL |
Really enjoyed this. Not sure of "your" meaning behind it, but art is interpreted by those who admire it. Keep up the great writing. |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
Wow!! This is great!! Evoked some big-time feelings in me!! Like the style too!! Look forward to seeing more. |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Winston clues? It's so Kool It's so Belair It's so Capri No matter what brand Most end up like The Marlboro man Lying in a Chesterfield |
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