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Images abound... four senryus --- #2 to #5
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Images abound... four senryus --- #2 to #5 |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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#2 Anticipation Saree-clad woman Flushed face, marked in vermilion - Bride awaiting groom #3 Preface To A Dream Distant echoes sound Lilting mystical music - A nightmare begins #4 A Shrink Speaks Troubled and distressed By dreary everyday chores ~ Exhale the air out #5 Populous India A billion men sight New millennium dawning - Crowded India  ...fancy any one in particular?...thanks... [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 08-24-2000).] |
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allan Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620On the road |
I found these to be full of atmosphere, well done Sudhir. (I particularly liked the last one!) |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Sudhir, Excellent collection of Senryu vignettes! Dennis :^) < !signature--> Moonbeams radiate When the veiling cloud has past Playful shadows dance Dennis L. White :^) [This message has been edited by Dennis L. White (edited 08-24-2000).] |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Sudhir; Thank you for the "buffet" here in this pub. Nice to feast on the variations of food for the soul! You set out a lovely smorgasbord! Ellie Summers haunting melody that awakens the butterflies, calling them to join the dance in their silent song of praise to God. eL |
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BSC
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
You, kind sir, are on a roll!!!! These are wonderful, simplicity packed full of fine images. Bonnie |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
All of these are very good. 2)bashful 3)fright 4)"familiar"  5)DistressI loved the title too.  Marcy |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Sudhir these are excellent and you're soooooooo ahead of me now, hehe. Juls |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank You all, my very good friends... thank you for all your kindness... regards, sudhir P.S. had to change a few for they did not match up to the 5-7-5 rule... now they should... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh, Sudhir, my friend~ These are just wonderfully well-done. You are really improving your style. How versatile is your talent ! ! Enjoying your progress very much. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
ditto everyone! I would say it, but why? It is all in the replies! Great work Sudhir! stay cool  ~~Lavada~~  "For every beauty, there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth, there is an ear somewhere to hear it For every love, there is a heart some |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Hey Marge, my friend, thanks for all the guidance so far with the haiku/senryu styles... a friend and a mentor, you are... Sweet Lavada, Thanks a million for your lovely response... regards to all, sudhir |
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