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Haiku # 4 or maybe Senryu#1??? tell me please... Ice Cream Parlour
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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Ice Cream Parlour Cold winter winds blow From the heart of my freezer- Child likes vanilla! [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 08-21-2000).] |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Sudhir, Looks like a poem bridging both displines! Well done! Dennis :^) Moonbeams radiate When the veiling cloud has past Playful shadows dance Dennis L. White :^) |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Sudhir as you know I'm learning right along with you, so I have no clue. But this I do know,...me like, me likes. And yummy on that vanilla. Ummm you gonna share??? LOL. Great friend. I want ice cream nowwwwwwwww! Juls |
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Oh my gosh, miss a day or two and look what's going on....Aren't they fun Sudhir??? This is great and tasty too!!!! Gotta run and find the first 3.....Bonnie |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Well, i like chocolate, but would take vanilla if you're offering  Nice work! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sudhir~ Well, my friend .... I'll have a double-dip with SENRYU sprinkles on top ! Wonderfully, well done ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Sudhir, Delightful!! Great idea! What a treat you have served us. Marcy |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Nicely done, Sudhir. I side with the senryu croud. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Sudhir, haiku is about nature while senryu is just about everything else... me like this muchly...i am turning 20 soon but i can never resist a wonderful cone of icecream from the ice-cream man |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
So it is senryu then... thanks for the fantastic and wonderful replies... seems like everybody is up for a treat... just one point... maybe tangential but... this is about nature.. nature of a child... seasonal reference.. winter winds... a moment described also... moment when the ice-cream vendor takes vanilla from his freezer... why not haiku? hmmm...  let's debate if need be... and figure out... I agree senryu might win over haiku with this one because of a million reasons that I don't know but then I will be happy... for my firts senryu... regards to all, sudhir |
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allan Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620On the road |
i really liked this family moment very much. it said a lot to me... |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
You're lucky my husband works for Schwan's Ice Cream, or I would be bombarding your door with my checkbook in hand j/k, Sudhir, Great Senryu also! Keep that ice cream coming! stay cool  ~~Lavada~~  "For every beauty, there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth, there is an ear somewhere to hear it For every love, there is a heart some |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
allan, thanks for coming by... and am glad that it "talked" to you... lavada, thanks a bunch... btw- I accept Cash only... LOL  regards, sudhir |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Sudhir; This lovely piece needs it's own category...maybe a "Senku", as in, "Senku" very much! Ellie P.S. Thank you very much for all you sincere replies to me, I very much appreciate them. E< !signature--> Summers haunting melody that awakens the butterflies, calling them to join the dance in their silent song of praise to God. eL [This message has been edited by ellie LeJeune (edited 08-23-2000).] |
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