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wordancer
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since 2000-07-30

Posts 809
VA

0 posted 2001-04-07 01:23 PM

Dark blue twilight
flows over the garden.
In the gathering clouds
of pensive thought,
the woman wonders
if this is all there will be.

On evening breeze,
the fragrance of moon flowers
overwhelm her with their
intensity.

Wordancer, the one who dances with words.

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

1 posted 2001-04-07 01:26 PM

I love your dancing words. Joyce

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2001-04-07 06:32 PM

This.....is wonderful!

Trillium

Member Patricius

since 2001-03-09

Posts 12098
Idaho, USA

3 posted 2001-04-07 06:47 PM

Very pensive and beautiful.

Betty Lou Hebert

ellie LeJeune
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since 2000-01-10

Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA

4 posted 2001-04-07 08:09 PM

Wonder no more! There is much more as your poem floats with ethereal beauty across my mind, so will beauty and enchantment come to you! Love, Ellie

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

coyote
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since 2001-03-17

Posts 1077

5 posted 2001-04-07 11:49 PM

Speaking as one who "dances with wolves".
I liked this poem very much,
"dances with words".

"I hate quotes, they suck!"
I.G. Norance

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

6 posted 2001-04-08 10:03 AM

I love my garden and I love the picture you paint for us here!

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

laryalee
Member

since 2000-06-19

Posts 352
Alberta, Canada

7 posted 2001-04-08 11:45 PM

wordancer, this has a mystical feel to it...a longing, a wondering....a hint of forboding.
Cool write!
Lary

Amber Moon
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since 2001-04-09

Posts 1
North Carolina

8 posted 2001-04-09 12:02 PM

In this poem, there is a sense of stillness in the imagery, in the external portrait of a woman alone with nature. There is a magical simplicity in this image, and yet, the action--the conflict--occurs within her. It seems that there is so much in her state of being that unless one has experienced such connection with the Universe, one may not see the true beauty in this poem. What draws me into this poem is not only what is said, but what is left unspoken. It is a beautiful piece with true depth that induces much contemplation within the reader.

wordancer
Senior Member

since 2000-07-30

Posts 809
VA

9 posted 2001-04-09 03:46 PM

Amber Moon, hello and welcome to the Corner Pub. I’m so pleased that you saw in-between the words and found the unspoken as it was meant to be. I did this last week for a writing exercise and it was critique elsewhere as lovely, but was felt to be incomplete because it (supposedly) ended in mid-stream. Yes, sometimes there is more in the unspoken than in the framework of the words, but each is needed to complete the picture.

Thanks to all who replied to this, with all your lovely, lovely responses.

WO

Red_Feather
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since 2001-01-19

Posts 131
The Vagabond Sea

10 posted 2001-04-09 11:45 PM

I too love the image and the vivid character, with her story untold. I like poetry that inspires the imagination and thought independent of the poem itself... when a poem is able to mean something different to everyone because of the unsaid and doors left open.

One's not half two it's two are halves of one EE Cummings

Brad Majors

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since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

11 posted 2003-11-25 02:35 PM

awesome

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