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The Promise (first try at haiku)

BSC

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0 posted 2000-08-09 07:41 AM

Apricot morning
Rainbow at the horizon
Precious reminder

[This message has been edited by BSC (edited 08-09-2000).]

ellie LeJeune
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since 2000-01-10

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King of Prussia, PA USA

1 posted 2000-08-09 08:04 AM

Dearest Bonnie: WOW! You go girl! Fantastic first haiku! Beautifully done. love ya, ellie

Summers haunting melody
that awakens
the butterflies,
calling them to join
the dance
in their silent song
of praise to God.

eL

Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2000-08-09 08:09 AM

Bonnie~
PERFECT !
And ... perfectly lovely !
~*Marge*~

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Dennis L. White
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since 2000-02-17

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Michigan, U.S.A.

3 posted 2000-08-09 08:40 AM

Bonnie,
An excellent first Haiku, Beautifully descriptive snapshot of a special moment! Well Done!
Dennis :^)

Moonbeams radiate
When the veiling cloud has past
Playful shadows dance

Dennis L. White :^)

Jon Mewett
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4 posted 2000-08-09 08:56 AM

Full of potent beauty.

Jon

Lakewalker
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5 posted 2000-08-09 11:26 AM

Very well done, I love it!

dgvarner
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High Springs, Florida

6 posted 2000-08-09 02:50 PM

apricot morning....how could i not love that!!

awesome..especially for a first try!!!

dg

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allan
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since 2000-04-09

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On the road

7 posted 2000-08-09 03:33 PM

This may well be one of my most favourite haikus ever! great work!

Jamie
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Blue Heaven

8 posted 2000-08-09 10:43 PM

Beautiful Image....classic haiku

Majestic
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since 2000-01-11

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houston, tx.

9 posted 2000-08-09 11:17 PM

paints a vivid picture...great job

"To live is to love; To truly LOVE is to live!" ~kg~

kaile

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singapore

10 posted 2000-08-11 06:07 AM

a beautiful scene of beauty you paint here....very nice!!

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