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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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A peach of streak across the sky, caressed, a bless, cornflower blue, liquid lava light surprise as yellow steals the night away yearning,turning, satin sway, tears of teal, to slap my eyes... and no, I'm not the least surprised, that you would look the other way... |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
Oh I felt slapped in the end! This is so astounding, serenity. Sigh...beautifully cruel...*S* love, michelle If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™ |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
Wow... Now, if this isn't vibrant imagery, I'm not sure what is...and great (though unexpected) ending! Beautiful job, serenity!  Little Spyro T. Dragon |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ This - 'A peach of streak across the sky, caressed, a bless, cornflower blue, liquid lava light surprise as yellow steals the night away yearning,turning, satin sway,' .... is so vividly lovely ... and this - 'tears of teal, to slap my eyes... and no, I'm not the least surprised, that you would look the other way...' ... so sad. Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
It's cause peach and yellow are ugly colors!!! But... ok... I still liked it...  |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
WOW Serenity amazing piece. That ending slaps hard. ouch! "I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone" manic street preachers |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wow! Serenity, this is fabulous! The ending is such a contrast to the rest of the poem yet blends so smoothly into it. A masterpiece, in my opinion! Denise |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Serenity- OUCH! Definitely felt that ending. This is terrific. Thanks for sharing.  -vicky "I have read your words, and within them I have found your heart. -vlraynes |
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Majestic Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 264houston, tx. |
very beautiful.....though it's a shame we get caught up in life so much so that we ignore the ones we love the most.... "To live is to love; To truly LOVE is to live!" ~kg~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks to all. I appreciate the warm welcome here at the Pub...next time, remind me to leave before sun-up!!! Laughs and Hugs for everyone. |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Serenity, this is amazing. Totally breathtaking girl. I just can't get over it. All the best to ya, Juls |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
"A peach of streak" that caught my attention! What a description.. and no, serenity, I'd never look the other way.. I wanna see it too!! ^_^ Lovely.. almost bitter, feeling empty, ending.. loved this.. Luv, Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu (Please e-mail me at yu_lan_wen_@hotmail.com instead of the e- |
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TexUS Member
since 2003-03-20
Posts 228 |
wow, this seems to be my life... excellent write. |
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