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Said With Affection |
Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Said With Affection He laughs, His words ringing in my ears. Pointing out my every fault, Every second that I live; I hear his words Chase me down the street. And he laughs. I smile, as the tears well, Building up inside my soul, Until, When I am alone, They follow a worn pathway, Coursing down my cheeks. And he laughs. He doesn’t see; No-one sees, For I hide behind my smile. He thinks its all a game, But I can’t tell him how I feel; He holds me in his web, For all my resentment Melts away at the kind words, That he throws in my direction, Every once, blue moon. As I forgive him, The taunts start again, One too many, two too many, Leave un-healing scars, To rot in my being, As I weep from, One too many, two too many, Cruel words, Said with affection. ........... Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu (Please e-mail me at [email protected] instead of the e- |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Lynne- This is wonderful - very well written. The feelings run very deep with this. "...for I hide behind my smile..." Oh, how many times I've been there. Thanks for sharing this. -vicky "I have read your words, and within them I have found your heart. -vlraynes |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
U've said it all, Lynne...sometimes we juz hate ourselves for loving somebody..... love, michelle If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Well written, Lynne. Very true for many people, I'm sure. I wish they would realize that they don't have to put up with being spoken to like that. Real love doesn't 'talk' that way. Denise |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Yeah.. ^_^ Thank you all.. ^_^ Just want u to know though, this WAS written about someone I love, but not a 'partner' as such.. more.. my father.. Luv, Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu (Please e-mail me at [email protected] instead of the e- |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
lynne- Just had to tell you that you did a good job of leading the reader's mind in the right direction on this. The first time I read it, I felt that it was written for a parental figure, and more specifically, your father. Truely love this one. -vicky "I have read your words, and within them I have found your heart. -vlraynes |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
oops Lynne sorry misinterpreted, i guess we can't hate ourselves for loving our dads!!! love, michelle If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™ |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
Well, I never would have guessed--I'm glad I got the subject in one of the replies before having to guess... And this is one wonderful piece you've got here, Lynne! Fantastic job!! Little Spyro T. Dragon |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Thanx Vicky! ^_^ Well i am glad that that's what this piece portrayed.. ^_^ Michelle.. tha's ok! ^_^ No, u r right.. I can't.. ^_^ Spyro.. well, thank you very much, sir! *_^ glad ya liked it Spyro... Luv y'all.. Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu (Please e-mail me at [email protected] instead of the e- |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Yu, I know "exactly" what you mean! Your style inherited? Forgive my candor. "One too many, two too many, Cruel words," |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
^_^ Mmm, hehe. well, don't know that I need to forgive your candour, as I am not sure I understand what you mean there.. inherited? Luv, Lynne |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Hi! Read your e, 'plained it all! Great read, btw. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Lynne, a lovely poem. really enjoyed reading this. "To the centre of the city where all roads meet, waiting for you,To the depths of the ocean where all hopes sank, searching for you," Joy divison |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
oh I've been there many a time.. Great piece and a reminder I desperately needed tonight. Dawn |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
oh I've been there many a time.. Great piece and a reminder I desperately needed tonight. Dawn |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
and that is so confusing...I am becoming quite a fan of yours, always thoughtful work Yu Lan...applauding. |
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jamesjiao Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 268Backwaters of Avalon |
Lynne, this is a good piece, nice feeling. i really like it.. keep on with your prose style, i am always your fan. - James The beauty of nature is displayed, not through itself, but through the creatures dwelling within its bosom. |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Thanx Brian.. ^_^ Callie, I'm glad u enjoyed this.. thank you.. ^_^ Serenity.. A fan!! ^_^ Hehe, thank you serenity.. well I must say, I thoroughly enjoy reading all of your work too.. quite an exceptional poet u r.. *_^ James.. thanx.. ^_^ gosh.. 2 fans, hehe.. I shall get cold.. *_^ Thank u everyone!! ^_^ Love, Lynne |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
"As I forgive him, The taunts start again, One too many, two too many, Leave un-healing scars, To rot in my being, As I weep from, One too many, two too many, Cruel words, Said with affection." hmm..yeah..the ones we love the most will be the ones who hurt us the most..because we love them...they dont always seem to realize they are causing hurtfulness.. youve done a wonderful job portraying the ache caused by careless words... dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Thanx dg.. yeah, that's just right.. if someone can hurt you, it means you care about them.. the more you care, the easier it is for them to hurt you.. thanks for reading this.. ^_^ Love, Lynne |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Yu Lan, this flows so beautifully and i dig the mature sentiments that radiate out from this gem....very nice...you have expressed some deeply-felt-but-hard-to-put-on-paper emotions very well indeed keep writing |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Wow. This is amazing, I really felt this poem. Thank you for sharing it with us |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Hi Lynne, So glad this one came back around. You already know I think your writing is excellent! ...and only sixteen! Wow, you have expressed your feelings so well through this poem. Keep it up....sorry,Lu could not delete above...well, let it serve as a reminder, when communication gets scrambled, keep talking...get it worked out. You are precious! Marcy |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Thanks kaile.. ^^ a gem.. aw, u r sweet.. *_^ lakewalker; tha's ok, thank U, for reading it! ^_^ Thanx Marcy.. I'm glad u like this.. (15years.. ) hey, and I'd already forgotten.. *_^ thank you Marcy.. aww, ain't u an angel.. ^^ Love, Lynne |
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jamesjiao Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 268Backwaters of Avalon |
Oh, ok thank you everyone. ( |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Umm.. what??? |
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