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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida ![]() |
raw sadness quakes my soul. something inside crashes, breaking as glass, to cut my internal being. i bleed... wet prisms soak my eyes and sting. they fall from my face; clearly the blood of my body-- leaving me a hollow shell to call my own. my heart echoes in the emptiness-- beating viciously for the piece that was stripped away... the internal ache shuffles through the darkness to find its light-- only to find, the stream at its feet is red; there is no morning... -dgvarner "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
dg- WOW! This one is raally good! I love it!!! I really feel this. Oh, and did I mention, WOW!!! ![]() love ya muchly, tricks "I have read your words, and within them I have found your heart. -vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 08-01-2000).] |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
U conveyed these feelins really well, dg! The hollowness, the stabs of pains... Great one dg! *huGz* love, michelle If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™ |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
tricks: didnt want you to think i was gettin' soft and writin' happy stuff ![]() heehee... this is one of those, "ouch! it wont stop hurting!!" things..the poem usually sifts the poison from my system, but this time took a little longer to go away.... ![]() midnight: the stabs of pain...yep..glad i could convey it well..thanks for reading and replying!! ![]() dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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wordancer Senior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 809VA |
ah, the depths of soul pain that causes such anguish . . . well written, one can see the flow of beating crimson with each word. Lady Nogs |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
thanks lady ![]() ![]() your response is much appreciated ![]() dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
oh this really hurts.....the pain is so intense... youve expressed your anguish very well... enjoyed the poem (but hope things are well for you) ~Dawn whatcha doing in this darkness baby when you know love will set you free? will you stay in the sea forever Drowning there for all eternity? ~Live |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Wow! I loved it. "wet prisims soak my eyes and sting" (my favorite line there) Joy Gather ye rosebuds while ye may, Old time is still a-flying, And this same flower that smiles today To-morrow will be dying. -Robert Herrick |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
my heart echoes in the emptiness-- beating viciously for the piece that was stripped away... Wow, this one really gets your emotions going, good job! |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
pout, joy, lakewalker: thanks so much for reading! i really appreciate your responses ![]() dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This caputures the very essence of anguish. Very well written. Denise |
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Marsha![]()
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Dee, that's what I meant, the way you have with words is so amazing. ![]() |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
denise: glad you stopped to read me--your responses are much appreciated ![]() marsha: my own private applause section! glad to hear from you again! thank you for your comments ![]() dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
I'm going to cry! ![]() Love, Lynne |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
yu lan: hmm..unbearable it was..but it was a good while back--and bro and i are back on track ![]() thanks for reading! dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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