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Lady Lost Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 470
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The fiddler is playing loudly men and women cheer; raising up their glasses, yelling a hardy 'here here', A man's voice yells out from back beyond the bar "Are we cheering because we won the war? are we cheering for the stars? For all of you are happy; but you did not ever see, the blood that was shed on this land so that you can celebrate this victory!" As the man walks closer to the front silence surrounds the place; he only has one arm, scars covering his rugged face. "I have a tale to tell you one that may be hard to hear; But I know the truth my friends, of the war for which you cheer." I was on your side you see doing my duty as a man; traveling abroad fighting battles in distant land." "I seen men die out there on the fields every night; I seen men cry out in agony, from a lost bayonette fight. I seen the face of horror of pain and of death; I seen promising young boys take their very last breath." "They all look the same you know, same as your own; crying out for their mothers, wanting to go home." "So cheer not for your victory but mourn for those who died; those boys will not be going home now, doesn't matter from which side. A mother lost her boy A father lost his son; So now you tell me..., Who is it that really won?"< !signature--> You can never have too much fiction; reality can be such a bore |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
What a magnificent tale you tell of courage and truth. Your poetic rhyme and flow are exquisite. You have a very great talent. Ellie Summers haunting melody that awakens the butterflies, calling them to join the dance in their silent song of praise to God. eL |
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Lady Lost Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 470 |
Thank you for your kind words, Ellie, it means a lot to me! |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Lady Lost, Your writing shows thoughtfulness and depth. You've ended your poem with a thought provoking question, Who is it that really won? Soliders are the rich mans pawns, true, ideally we fight to maintain freedom, but that is not always the case and the price of our involvement is NOT always justified. Great piece! Dennis :^) < !signature--> Moonbeams radiate When the veiling cloud has past Playful shadows dance Dennis L. White :^) [This message has been edited by Dennis L. White (edited 07-20-2000).] |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
wow...this IS very thought provoking..and wonderfully written, i might add.. very touching.. (i wish you'd summitted this for the book! i submit a lot of things that arent near this well-written, "just in case" lol) dg "i speak in written word--my lips, no sound may utter..." dgvarner |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
Touching and so true. Very good read. Melton |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
Gave me chills. You speak the truth in a way that doesn't point fingers or belittle. Excellent flow, good topic and a question that only has one answer - there are no winners. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Brilliantly stated, in war their are no winners. Excellent poem Lady Lost. why must we pray screaming? why must not death be redefined? we shut our eyes we stretch out our arms and whirl on a pane of glass-patti smith |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent poem, Lady Lost! Denise |
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deleeme Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766NEW ENGLAND, USA |
L.L. Your writings are so meaty-to fill a hungry mind--to help us look at things differently-and perhaps our life redefine. Your keenness of thought& observance- and your well crafted verse- make your poetic works an excercise in enjoyment-investigation-and enlightenment. Keep up the good work. David "GOD GIVES- but man must open his hand." (German Proverb) |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Lady Lost, You bring tears to my eyes with this poem, it speaks with such strength and reality. So many have lost their lives and so many never even recognize. |
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kelieth Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 314Normal IL - USA |
If asked... Battles fought Both won and lost are not worth their bloddy cost. To smell the sulfer, your rifle gives. To hear the screams, where death is. They do bleed and so do we. thus I agree Who has the victory? Moving piece. I feel it with my heart. Kevin "Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals." |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
You paint a nostalgic and tragic picture with your flair, LadyLost. Thanks for sharing this... you opened up my third eye...and I feel so very fortunate! love, michelle If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™ |
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Darkened Treasures Junior Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 18nj |
A tale of great heart and feeling The scenes of gore leave my head reeling Simply marvoulous once again This tale of heart and pain Who would have thought a good little girl like you could destroy my beautiful wickedness. |
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Wikket Member
since 2000-01-29
Posts 340Santa Clara, CA USA |
As a soldier myself, I can relate to this one. Although I've never been in a battle, I have seen those who have come back; some of those same soldiers fill the Hospitals even today. Their pain and sacrifice has given me the grace to live freely, and I must not forget that. Thank you for this...it is a very honorable poem. ~~Jamie |
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CitiZen-One Member
since 2000-09-22
Posts 84New Mexico |
This is one of the Most powerful poems I have ever read. It chilled me to the bone indeed. Such truer words were never spoken. You truly painted a vivid picture for me. I saw this big sweaty pub, with cigarrette smoke and oak, people swilling beer with jar heads and green threads. And I saw the man with the One arm as he pushed through those window shutter doors and I saw the age in his eyes and the pain in his lips. Thank you |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Nicely written..enjoyed..  |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
One of my close friends was in combat and had to watch while his friend died beside him. He said that it was the hardest thing to see, because he knew that it didn't have to happen. This reminded me of him and his lost soldier friend. Your poem touched me deeply. Thankyou for sharing it. With a little piece of tomorrow, You'll have to kiss yesterday goodbye. Because today won't last forever, And the past will only make you cry. |
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