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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) 
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Through the years < !signature-->I've wished to be A grown up inside This world I see I've had my days Of joyful glee Turned upside down Writhed inside of me Stars have their moment And then they die At work I glowed Blinding the light Friends did abound All came knocking And running through Straight in the door In school passing tests Radiating all the way Going along at a happy speed Skipping along at good beat A groove in my dreams With a bounce in my step Smile across my face My heart pounding At wonderous things One sudden day All falling quite into place There I saw you in my space A joyous day I will never forget My angel sparkling bright Oh what smiles and such charm Gently moving right to me Lost in such total awe of you While we stood there together You simply completed me "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown [This message has been edited by Justbleu (edited 07-17-2000).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Justbleu, WOW!!! what a poem... surpassed the challenge very efficiently ... great flow... and I did read it all in a single breath.... regards, sudhir |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
" you simply completed me" Lovely and so romantic. ellie Summers haunting melody that awakens the butterflies, calling them to join the dance in their silent song of praise to God. eL |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Justbleu, beautifully written thanks for taking the challenge and as Sudhir say you well exceeded the brief. wonderful poem. "Out of sorrow entire worlds have been built Out of longing great wonders have been willed They're only little tears, darling, let them spill" Nick |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautiful, Bridgette! Challenge well met! Denise |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
Very pretty Justbleu! Lightheart yet in-depth. *S* I LOVE IT! If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™ |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Justbleu, This is fabulous, I enjoyed it very much, and the ending is perfect. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Thanks everyone!!!! I enjoyed the challenge...it was a lot of fun to see what I could do with the lines!! I also enjoyed reading the other poems for the challenge tha I've read!!! Thank You all again!! Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
love the ending..reminds me of Jerry Maguire the movie where Tom Cruise touched Renee's heart by saying the exact line  thanx for the read and the meomory  |
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kelieth Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 314Normal IL - USA |
Very beautiful and enjoyable. Kevin "Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals." |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Kaile...it is very close but the exact line was "You Complete Me"!! Thank You...I am glad you liked it!!!! Thank You again Kevin...glad you enjoyed it!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awww...beautiful |
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