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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand 
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Hellooooo, a poem from when I was 11 years old.. The Lonely Shore Tiny shells lie forlornly scattered, On warm, wet sand. Water lapping gently, Against the shore, Leaves fluffy white froth, Stranded, As it moves back down the beach. Smooth wooden bodies, With exciting tales, Of rough journeys, on raging waters, Now lie silent, On a bed of sand. Strings of rubbery beads, Strung on leather seaweed straps, Limp, baking in hot sun. And above, Gulls’ cries pierce the serenity, Circling and reeling, In blue paradise. Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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chibi_dragon Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 58 |
Right now I am doing the dragon equivalent of crying...  . Your poem sounds a little sad...--the cute dragon |
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deleeme Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766NEW ENGLAND, USA |
Yu Lan, Was trhis a poem written when you were twelve, or about an experience you had when you were twelve--I was not clear on that--either way, this is a a poem may lovely by the descriptiveness of the words you use to paint this lovely tropical or coastal scene. Thanks for taking us to your paradise. David |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
A melancholic piece, beautifully portrayed! Your painting of the picture inspires me. Thanks for the treat *S* |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wonderfully done, Lynne. Beautifully descriptive! Denise |
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kelieth Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 314Normal IL - USA |
Yu Lan, Touching piece for one so young. I thus hope it's been better since. Great writing. Kevin "Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals." |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Thank you! ^_^ deleeme - I wrote this when I was 11 years old. ^_^ thanx cute dragon, yeah.. I guess it is.. almost.. more serene.. lonely.. ^_^ Midnightblues, Denise and Kevin.. thank you all for your kind responses.. ^_^ Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
hey Yu, you already know that this piece impressed me ...what catchs my attention is the promise of greatness this early poem displays. Lynne, don't ever stop writing, no matter what life serves up... realize your potential. lol even if it takes til you're old and gray and have grandchildren! hugz, bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
thank you Daniel.. ^_^ no.. I will never stop writing.. I love it too much.. ^_^ Thanx, Luv, Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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skyshine 
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Yu Lan, this is wonderful....you were only 11 when you wrote this! You have a great talent!  ~sky I hope someday you get the chance to live like you were dying.... |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Wow! You've been digging to find this, Skyshine! I haven't been to PIP for so long... I'm studying full time this year, and working the other part, lol.. Actually, I think I'll post my latest poem though. I've been away FAR too long. Thanks so much!! Bless your cotten sockies, you poetic maniacs. ^_^ |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I am glad she did dig, as I had not seen this treasure. Loved this as I live by the sea: Smooth wooden bodies, With exciting tales, Of rough journeys, on raging waters, Now lie silent, On a bed of sand. Good to read you and yes, do post one of your latest as it will be so good to read you again. |
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jamesjiao Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 268Backwaters of Avalon |
Hey Lynne, Good to see you are posting again. Been hanging around here for the last 2 years without seeing your posts. I hope to see more of your recent poems soon. - James |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Thanks James.. This isn't a recent one though, it's a very old one, lol... Skyshine went digging..  Yes, I've not been in for about that long.. 2 years.. SHOCKING.. Thanks for reading! Bless your cotten sockies, you poetic maniacs. ^_^ |
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