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Wikket Member
since 2000-01-29
Posts 340Santa Clara, CA USA 
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Woke up this morning Trying hard to hide my melancholy I joined you for breakfast And we continued our lie Every day it is similar You are cheery And so am I Our terrible lie Can you imagine a time When we awoke and did not speak Realizing our moods would cause tension Tension caused by too little life? I do wish sometimes As I leave for work sullenly Dreading the day already Weeping far within The lie, terrible and unending Would cease to be And I would know the real you And you the real me But, the lie drags on for now For it is not written in the stars And perhaps it will never be I am my own companion The dreaded truth Gathered in a lifetime Sentenced for an eternity Realized too late by, Jamie, 1999 **I know I know it's sullen, but that was the mood I was in when I wrote it. "...at night I cling to you I'm so afraid; afraid the day will come and I'll wake up and find you gone. But you promise that you'd not abandon me and kissed my fears away but I woke up to that day..." 'Waking up Beside You' by Stabbing Westward |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
But, sullen can be beautiful--as this is. It seems we have much in common, Jamie. For, here's another poem we both share in. ~Gene |
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Sasikat Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 290St. Petersburg, FL |
Yes, it's very difficult pretending everything is right when in reality everything is wrong. Nice poem! |
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Wikket Member
since 2000-01-29
Posts 340Santa Clara, CA USA |
Awww...thanx Gene. And thank you Sasikat for your understanding 8) |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Well, you get down to it we all must be our own companion in a way! I think most of us can relate to this! Denise |
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Exile Junior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 42 |
This hits ENTIRELY too close to home! This is how I lived for several years....and to be honest, I don't know if I was better off then, or now. If poems are meant to evoke emotion, then this one was a smashing success. I ended up staring at my hands for the longest time.... Exile |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Been there....done that...you captured the feelings exactly! (BTW - your photo needs to be uploaded instead of the cat icon..sorry, it's a rule - sigh!) |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Thanks for this poem  Made me realize how much better my life is these days. Nothing worse than being together, but still alone. [This message has been edited by Munda (edited 02-04-2000).] |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
Sullen, maybe.. But written with quite a bit of truth in it.. I like this a lot.. MAY THE ROAD RISE TO MEET YOU, MAY THE WIND BE ALWAYS AT YOUR BACK MAY THE SUN SHINE UPON YOUR FACE THE RAINS FALL SOFT UPON YOUR FIELDS AND, UNTIL WE MEET AGAIN, MAY GOD HOLD YOU IN THE PALM OF HIS HAND Irish Blessing |
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Swåmp¤Faerÿie Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358Illinois |
You know,it's my beleif that writing ALL happy cheery peachy poetry ALL the time is a sin.....er....well...it's unhealthy to say the least,lol. Well what i'm trying to say every light poet should be able to let out their feelings in something dark,and every dark poet should learn also to let out their happiness in something light. Sullen is perfectly wonderful when you need it....and we all do  And there she weaves by night and day, a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Well said, Jamie Another great poem.. Yeah, agreed.. If we weren't sad sometimes, how would we know when we are happy?? ^_^ Good poem.. Lynne |
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PrincessPoet Member
since 2000-04-15
Posts 133Long Beach, Calif. |
No, No it isn't too Sullen A poet should write what they Know & Feel: Sad, Happy, Bitter, Angry. Thrive on your emotion Like you have here  Good Work, Jamie Your failures in life come from not realizing your nearness to success when you give up. -Yoruba Proverb Poetry & Friendship, PrincessPoet |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
I agree with everyone else, any emotion is never wrong...be it melancholy, joy, or in your case sullen! Great poem! Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Krysondra New Member
since 2000-04-10
Posts 7 |
I don't know if I would say sullen... Anyone who's lived it knows that it makes you feel so drained and empty. It's a beautiful work. ~ Krysondra ~ ~Angel of Illusion~ |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Wikket, My thoughts amount to all of the ones before me but Exiles feelings is very, very close to mine and to think its my anniversary today and I am at as loss as what to do for him, beautiful poem here enjoyed it much, Cerenity |
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