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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland 
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Where bodies roam without knowledge or need of anything safe their own moment, searching quietly so as not to stir the dreamer's ocean, left calm not disturbed by the slightest ripple. Trace in time (though it is of no bearing) a form to be understood in. Choose a form tender and pristine, shine pearls for eyes, with their prism vantage this world is so much more breathtaking. Curl into me, and speak with hushed breath, not words for they fail to express true emotion. Stroke in the most effortless way. Conserve your energy and resist passion, for forced emotion is empty. Craft round with soft hands in the sand and shift its weight to blanket us. Bodies sleep in an eternal embrace, sharing as they dream an understanding of what has been born between, between them. ------------------------ "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Libraries gave us power Then work came and made us free What price now for a shallow piece of dignity" Nicky Wire, A design for Life. manic street preachers "Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany Culture, alienation, boredom and despair" "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
brian..i want very much to reply to this--tho i find myself fumbling for the words.. "Curl into me, and speak with hushed breath, not words for they fail to express true emotion... ...forced emotion is empty." awesome lines..absolute truth! this is a wonderful piece of work... dg "A Poet's life is on written page; a scenario to take the stage--watch..." dgvarner |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wonderful writing, Brian! Denise |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Brian, Oh so beautiful. The second verse spoke (to me) of finding that perfect balance of harmony with another. A really good read,Brian. Marcy |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
They say dragons are magical... Well, that may or may not be true, but this piece definitely has some magical properties to it!!  Incredible piece, brian!  I don't know if I can come up with too many words for a reply either...this is one of those things that you have a hard time responding to, and yet you understand it so well. Not very many people can write things like this--you've got a gift!!  Little Spyro T. Dragon |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
I echo Spyro here Brian. Wonderful Piece of poetry. Jon |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
thanks you all for your wonderful replies and for taking the time to read this poem. Thanks. ------------------------ "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Libraries gave us power Then work came and made us free What price now for a shallow piece of dignity" Nicky Wire, A design for Life. manic street preachers "Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany Culture, alienation, boredom and despair" "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
This is really beautiful Brian. "Bodies sleep in an eternal embrace, sharing as they dream an understanding of what has been born between, between them." |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Brian; This is so ethereal, the feeling I get is two who have attained a state of spiritual soul mates, that are beyond earthly passions. This poem is hauntingly lovely. Ellie 02 |
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Stotty Junior Member
since 2000-06-06
Posts 29 |
Hi Brian, A truly meaningful poem, which I thoroughly enjoyed reading. I cannot write poetry, however I like reading poetry. Sometimes poetry reflects my true emotions, and inspires me. Your poetry is very inspiring and I thoroughly enjoy reading it. Keep writing! Kind regards, Michelle stott, Wales |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Bri, I LOVE this poem... every line is breathtaking it is so amazingly well written and expressed with that amazing gift you have for imagery and depth of emotion. I am so glad I didnt miss this one i once again am awed by the grace of your poets pen my friend... later-poetic prophet gator jm |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
"Curl into me, and speak with hushed breath, not words for they fail to express true emotion." Brian, I have to agree with dg and ellie....WOW. A state of spiritual soulmates...that's what I read too. Breathtaking, as I'm quickly learning most all your works are. Bravo! |
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kelieth Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 314Normal IL - USA |
Brian Excellent poem I feel you've captured the love experience great. Kevin |
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