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dgvarner
Member Elite

since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

0 posted 2000-05-29 01:20 AM

as the atmosphere;
your silence
screaming pain
through my head
screaming so loudly
it begins to pound
louder
louder--
i fall to my knees
pleading for the
quiet
of your voice
your silence is the atmosphere

--dgvarner
5-2-89

"A Poet's life is on written page; a scenario to take the stage--watch..." dgvarner

Lost Dreamer
Member Elite

since 1999-06-20

Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow

1 posted 2000-05-29 07:38 AM

dgvarner, Wow, this is a very intense poem, great job on it.

childomine
Senior Member

since 2000-01-25

Posts 818
st. petersburg, FL

2 posted 2000-05-29 10:13 AM

Very intense - the whole thing is awesome but the last line got to me....
"your silence is the atmosphere"

dgvarner
Member Elite

since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

3 posted 2000-05-29 11:09 AM

LD & CHILDOMINE...thanks! i really enjoy getting your replies! glad you enjoyed it

"A Poet's life is on written page; a scenario to take the stage--watch..." dgvarner

Little_Spyro
Senior Member

since 2000-01-09

Posts 659
San Diego, CA, USA

4 posted 2000-05-29 02:17 PM

I have to agree! Wow, this is good stuff!

I don't know if "intense" would be the right word...something more along the lines of "powerful"

Great job, and hope to see more!

Little Spyro T. Dragon

dgvarner
Member Elite

since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

5 posted 2000-05-29 04:12 PM

thanks little spyro! i feel honored to rate as "powerful"!!

"A Poet's life is on written page; a scenario to take the stage--watch..." dgvarner

Songbird
Member Elite

since 1999-12-15

Posts 2184
Missouri

6 posted 2000-05-29 09:54 PM

Been there, heard that.. silence can beat louder that a drum..

Jana Tovey
Member

since 2000-05-30

Posts 257
USA

7 posted 2000-05-30 05:36 PM

This is so true...those long heavy silences are devilish. Voices are at least expressive. Silences like these are just oppressive.

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

8 posted 2000-10-10 04:08 PM

dg-
  wow!  glad i started looking up
  these early posts of your.  i really
  like this one alot.    what is this
  fascination you and i have with the
  atmosphere anyway? lol

  love and hugs,
          -vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes

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