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blackhalo Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 467Denver, CO |
I am passionate and loving I sonder when the world will end I hear a Brazillian waterfall I see my God before me I want to be loved as I love others I am passionate and loving I pretend that I can fly I feel the stress of violent warfare I touch the veins in my wrist I worry about my friends I cry for the ones I've lost I am passionate and loving I understand that we need to change I say you should love God I dream of being in His castle I try to make a difference I hope someday there will be no prejudices I am passionate and loving Life defines no more than what it is you ask for. April 20, 2000 Alicia A. Renzelman |
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blackhalo Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 467Denver, CO |
here are actually two different ending verses to this, but I felt that this one was more appropriate, what do you think? Should I post the other one? Life defines no more than what it is you ask for. April 20, 2000 Alicia A. Renzelman |
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Wobbly Head Bob Member
since 2000-05-15
Posts 299Virginia, USA |
You ARE passionate and loving. These are the ideal worlds' most sought after qualities. You pose a good question to other reader/writers, What Am I? A poem that answers such a good question with flowing verse and deep feeling! I applaud this work, and I applaud what YOU ARE! |
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Wobbly Head Bob Member
since 2000-05-15
Posts 299Virginia, USA |
Sorry, I forgot to answer your question...I don't know what the other last verse is, and honestly after reading this, I like the way this one looks, you say what you are, you say what you should be, and you say what you think you are and should be!  *phew* So, I don't know...I should like to read the other one, but I like the entire work as is. |
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patricianne Member
since 2000-05-04
Posts 66 |
 Great poem, The I Am challenge seems to bring out our best qualities and thats wonderful!!! I'm still working on mine! Will post soon. Thanks for letting us get to know you better. |
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epoet Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 291grand rapid,MI, usa |
would like to see other ending. Otherwise great poem, you are who you are and from this I gather you are someone special. To this I say carpe diem. |
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blackhalo Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 467Denver, CO |
Ok, y'all asked for it! I understand he loves me I say I love him too I dream we'll be together forever I try not to fight with him I hope he'll always be there I am passionate and loving Didn't want to post it because I felt that it was more about the man I think I am in love with than myself, but then again, we seem to be somewhat joined at the hip. Life defines no more than what it is you ask for. April 20, 2000 Alicia A. Renzelman |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Siamese hey ........My favourite feline Best wishes Jon |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very nice, Alicia! I like the version that you first posted, because as you say, it is more about you than about the man you are in love with! Denise |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
Alicia - good job - no matter what ending you use. You weren't sure about the second ending because it's about the man you think you're in love with? But, anyone we love becomes a part of us so.... As Bob said, "these are the ideal worlds most sought after qualities". You sound like a wonderful, passionate and loving person. |
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