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bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

0 posted 2000-01-29 02:03 AM

I thought I'd leave the "amjors" long enough to drop some sweet petals on this sweet place. I wrote this poem a few days ago. Hope you all enjoy it.

Mike

-how to appreciate flowers-
i. rain
cluster of flowers weighed
down in mud.
leaves glistening, crumbs
of dirt darkening,
sliding down the leaves.
stems pushing forward, down, out,
up.

ii. dry
a wish in view.
head gentle, curling, uncurling,
folded along velvetcell lines.
a small green pedestal
of complete slow adoration
-- physical neediness to be loved --
balancing a centered silken heart.

fragrance, aroma of sweet
exhale, perfume natural,
scent slightly insistent.

cupped in invisible hands,
waterstraw through a central vase.
florescent molecules collecting,
brightening the tabletop, piano or cabinet.

or among its own,
the green and the colorful,
the world's many fragiled heart
awake and opensmiling.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

1 posted 2000-01-29 02:06 AM

Uh... that word should have been majors. Majors! It kinda looks french the way I have it, but I'm lousy at french (c'est vrai, n'est-ce pas?) See what I mean?

Mike

Little_Spyro
Senior Member

since 2000-01-09

Posts 659
San Diego, CA, USA

2 posted 2000-01-29 02:15 AM

Well, Mike, this is definitely a major poem!

I like how you title the parts...I can learn a lot from poets like you.

Great poem!

Little Spyro T. Dragon

Denise

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

3 posted 2000-01-29 10:32 AM

Thanks for bringing such lovely flowers to the Pub, Mike! They add a delightful aroma to the atmosphere!

Denise

Munda
Member Elite

since 1999-10-08

Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands

4 posted 2000-01-29 11:56 AM

Very lovely Mike, I could almost smell them.

Gene
Senior Member

since 2000-01-23

Posts 935
Colorado, USA

5 posted 2000-01-29 03:03 PM

I like the yin/yang (rain/dry) thing.

Nice! ~Gene

Martie

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

6 posted 2000-01-29 09:18 PM

I own a flower shop, and this certainly caught my interest. I really liked what you did with this, opened up a flower and spilled out the right words. Lovely!

Wikket
Member

since 2000-01-29

Posts 340
Santa Clara, CA USA

7 posted 2000-01-30 10:56 AM

Great! I wish I could enlighten my bf on the beauty of giving these wonderful little pleasures...

--Jamie

Exile
Junior Member

since 2000-01-23

Posts 42

8 posted 2000-01-30 12:17 PM

Very good! Like Munda, I can almost smell them, feel the wet earth on my hands as I cup a blossom....

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

9 posted 2000-01-30 06:54 PM

Thanks everyone. Glad you enjoyed the flowers.

And the best thing about poetry -- any kind of writing -- is we all learn from each other.

Mike

Broken_Winged_Angel
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 994
Small Town, Somewhere

10 posted 2000-04-14 05:25 AM

Reading this, I could picture and almost smell the flowers as you were describing them.. Wonderful job..

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
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11 posted 2004-12-25 10:12 AM

much enjoyed

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