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breezeinnc Junior Member
since 2000-04-26
Posts 47USA |
Separated Your heart becones me and I take a step forward hesitate only to step back I console my heart and it consoles me for even though I want to I cannot be with you Since we have been apart Fame and fortune have been mine but losing you has meant that I have nothing Those were the days when we swore we'ed never part You were my day as well as my night You reached out through space and we touched. And now I can feel you like a rainbow beautiful colourful misty so near yet so far stretched into eternity and much as a dream and my heart cries |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Yep Breeze to have the love of someone thats the ticket. You can't put a price on it. Nicely written Jon |
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Wikket Member
since 2000-01-29
Posts 340Santa Clara, CA USA |
Your poem almost mirrors my last relationship. Just goes to show you that sometimes, when you think your emotions are so right, they end up being so wrong. Oh well, how's that saying go?!?! 'Better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all...' Maybe someday I'll believe it!!! Take Care *huggle*, ~~Jamie "I keep breaking all the promises That I keep making to myself You'd think by now that I'd be over this Instead I'm feeling sorry for myself So why does everything seem desperate now? I should be feeling so alive But it feels like something's missing Something's wrong somehow It feels like something deep inside has died..." --Stabbing Westward |
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Meg Junior Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 12Manila, Philippines |
oh, i can relate so much to the poem ... i really liked it ... hope you can post more .. i'm looking forward to read more poems from you. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is so touching. I could feel the longing in it. Very well expressed! Denise |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Mmm.. so sad Breeze.. but, if we never have sad times, how can we tell when we are truly happy, huh? ^_^ well, nicely written.. Lynne |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
This is very well written, and very sad. |
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breezeinnc Junior Member
since 2000-04-26
Posts 47USA |
Thank you everyone Something that happened in the past. But again better loved than never at all. How true. breezeinnc |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
Hat's off to you.. This is wonderful. I awake to a world I don't want. There is no transition for me. I am in heaven. I am in hell. |
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DosPeros Junior Member
since 2000-05-09
Posts 40 |
Nicely done. When man is born he crys. When he has cryed enough he dies.:- |
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