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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
soft shivered whispers in dark of night from a bedtime story retold tis a ghostly, ghoulish tale to chill the blood of young and old white silken petticoats rustle against the floor noiseless footsteps in the hall soft keening cries of love unrequited slither up the wall in her wake bloody tendrils course with a chilling embrace though a mirror passes no shadow seen of her ashen face at stroke of twelve she sadly croons notes of her lovers lament heart thrust aside with careless laugh signaled her torment a knife appeared clutched in upraised hand to swing at him aloft but his was the quicker aim his thrust was hard hers much too soft her heart in deadly rent drained quickly blood of life whilst murderer smiled and quickly returned to his rich wife the dead shall walk forever awaiting vengeance on a hallowed Holy Grail and so she walks in dead of night blood marks her ghostly trail with lift of hand prepared to knock upon past lover’s door halting spirit in gasp as a light shines on the floor slashes seen on fingers held fast in her ghoulish stare she waits in deadly amazement that he knows that she is there slowly sunken eyes turn as phantom smile in haunt succumbs hear now the ghostly scratch “as something wicked this way comes”* ~~~~~ *By the pricking of my thumbs, Something wicked this way comes. Open, locks, Whoever knocks! Macbeth. Act iv. Sc. 1. Note: Whew! I think I need a couple of rewrites but for now, this will do. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
 Excellent. This is only the first part, yes? I want to see what happens next... |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
yes! MORE....you can't end it now!!! Excellent!!  |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thanks!!! I'm trying to write a sequel..but she's a stubborn ghost!  |
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HollyDazed New Member
since 2002-10-29
Posts 6 |
Excellent writing, enjoyed it! a-z ombie |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Oh I think this is good. A little choppy in parts, otherwise really well done. And SPOOKY!  --Beth Howl at the stars, whisper when you're sleeping, I'll be there to hold you, I'll be there to stop the chills and all the weeping. |
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anawnda Member
since 2002-07-26
Posts 113 |
good write!!!! love your ghost! i especially love it that you added an excerp from shakespeare at the end. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Oh, yes, you did it! Now you can have that sigh of relief---but for only a moment! You will be continuing on this chilling story---will you not?!? Please do not tell me that I have to wait until next Halloween?!?.... EA |
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