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Artur Hawkwing Member
since 1999-06-30
Posts 444USA |
Tired I look, reaching at nothing shadows flickering darkening, birds wading in pools, tears quiet unseen emptiness days drift I sit watching sun rise and sun set in cloudless sky, my soul in hollow corridors a wind blows against the walls, riven deep illusion, sigh.. dark moon rising stars singing made for breaking of heart, no more do I, break, nor heart, weep at anything... no, not in joy. [This message has been edited by Artur Hawkwing (edited 01-15-2000).] |
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Lynn Burdette Junior Member
since 1999-11-23
Posts 25Greensboro, Georgia ( I'm a Georgia peach!) |
This is very good. It is deep and that is what makes it good. [This message has been edited by Lynn Burdette (edited 01-15-2000).] |
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Majestic Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 264houston, tx. |
this is sad...but it touches the heart... |
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deleeme Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766NEW ENGLAND, USA |
I'm Glad to see you back at it again. This poem resonated with the sorrow, but ultimately triumps in the joy of personal determination & experience. I would say you show much talent & promise as a poet-great style too! David |
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Artur Hawkwing Member
since 1999-06-30
Posts 444USA |
Thank you Lynn, I am a very deep writer. Majestic, I would estimate 90% of my poems are sad, I can't still understand why. Thank you. David, the compliments do me much honor. I really didn't feel any joy when I finished writing this poem. Maybe if I put it into one sentence it might become clear. dark moon rising stars singing made for breaking of heart, no more do I, break, nor heart, weep at anything... no, not in joy. Sorry to show you what I meant but I meant that I felt I could not feel my heart break when I saw the beauty of God's works... "no, not in joy" was kind of a add-on to the previous few lines. Sorry if it caused any confusion. I, however, am feeling better now. Thanks. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
ok, with that little explanation of a paraghraph you did there, now you got me thinking. Was your heart breaking when you looked upon God's creation and you couldn't feel it doing so? Cause it shouldn't break but be filled with awe! This is sad and I'm glad you're letting it out. I hope we talk some more! <*\\\>< Where there is faith, there is love. Where there is love, there is peace. Where there is peace, there is GOD. Where there is GOD, there is no need. Hallmark |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
I enjoyed the simplicity. The way your poem touched me, was, all the different emotions that can come when you are open to the awesome wonder of God's handiwork. You have a beutiful spirit and a great gift as a poet. 02 |
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