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To Serve Man |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA ![]() |
~To Serve Man ~ bring me not the unsifted water of life the silt swirling mahogany with distaste Love me not with garlands of dried flower Thrive! it must be alive to be esteemed for a banquet is a myriad of tastes experiences to persevere a span of life and I am starving man even tho my plate be full for I know not how to prepare a dish fit for consumption - my tongue cleaves in my mouth from mistruth my offered sustenance purveyed on tarnished bronze who can refine silver from ash? an alchemist. . .i cannot be even though I am but a lowly Servant of Man when I long to just be a servant of G*d |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
very, very fine piece! Curious about the choice of an * instead of an 'o' in God, tho I really like the flavor and feel of this and the questions posed. |
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Joyce Johnson![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
This is so great. Another psalm. Write on. Joyce |
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Trillium![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Excellent poem! You've done a fine job of writing. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Sound like a Psalm.. Enjoyed. |
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jfreak Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306Yuma, AZ, USA |
Shadow... What edit? What critique? Dude...let me tell you this is one outstanding poem...whatever formula you have found to write with...don't change it...your chose of words is very refreshing and also and even more the use of those words...Just a WOW!!! J~ |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
Shadowrider, You do a wonderful job on your own, no need for assistance...if you are writing from your heart it will always come out right especially in God's eyes! Beautiful Poem! Cindi |
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Interloper![]() ![]()
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I like your piece and look forward to more from you ![]() Homepage : http://members.home.net/excalibur2501/interloper.htm |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
What an awesome poem. I cannot imagine editing a single word of this. It is truly beautiful. |
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