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Trillium 
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA 
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Like an Anchor When storms of life assault the soul, It's hard to keep your thinking whole. It shatters in a thousand parts And leaves defenseless, tender hearts. But faith is like an anchor where You tie your lifeline and you share With the ones you love, your grief. Sharing brings it's own relief And through the dark, you make your way Into a new and better day! Betty Lou Hebert Published by Drury's Publishing in "Words of the Soul" June 1996 [This message has been edited by Trillium (edited 08-18-2001).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BettyLou~ Oh, how true these words~ 'Sharing brings it's own relief' I've always felt that sharing dilutes the sorrow~ *Hugs* for this lovely reminder~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Betty, I like this so very, very much!!! The only suggestion I have is where you use the same word to rhyme with the line above. What do you think about using "will guard the day" instead of "has lead the way" for the last line? That phrase was the only thing that tended to weaken this extremely POWERFUL poem. I tell you one thing, I wish I could see a fix so easily in my poetry. [This message has been edited by VAS (edited 08-18-2001).] |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Dear Betty, This is so much truth. As you know I am a sharer of my grief and I think it has really helped. I saw a member of my family hold her grief to herself and I don't think she has ever healed. Joyce |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Marge: Thank you for your nice comments and also for the helping hand with the proofing! I appreciate both! Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
VAS: Thanks for your comments and very valid suggestion. For some reason I really struggled with this poem. I have changed the last line and hope you like it better. I appreciate your critique! Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Joyce: I agree with you whole-heartedly. Thanks for your comments. Betty Lou Hebert |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Oh, yes, very fine, rounds out the poem well!! |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
VAS: Thanks for re-reading and I'm glad to hear it flows better. Betty Lou Hebert |
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