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VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2001-06-20 10:16 AM

Clean and Ready
Virginia Salter

He stepped into the water
and was purified.
rising up, rejoicing
dancing into his future...

Clean, forgiven
he opened wide his doors
raised up his windows
breathed in life’s freshness

Emptied of all he was before
ready to be filled
yet too much a child
too new a man

In through the doors;
the windows, entered the world
to feed, to fill, to satisfy
the empty vessel of him

Forgetting the book at his side
blindly he invited in the food
the foul and the good
the foul, fouled up the good

© June 25, 2000

scout
Member

since 2001-06-16

Posts 175
no place owns me

1 posted 2001-06-20 10:34 AM

The last stanza reminds me of myself. I especially love the last line "the foul, fouled up the good". Time and time again the world influences me, and it's this constant cycle of cleaning and getting ready, to prepare my battle for the Lord, and once again i fall. But God is so persistint, He will never stop lifting and of us up. I really liked this poem, it's message was simple, and something people can relate to their own lives.

xscoutx
"Son of man with one blow I am about to take away from you the delight of your eyes. Yet do not lament or weep or shed any tears." - Ez. 24:1

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

2 posted 2001-06-20 10:37 AM

This is a very interesting poem. I didn't expect the last verse. But it is wonderful that all he needs to do is ask forgivness and start over. Joyce

Trillium

Member Patricius

since 2001-03-09

Posts 12098
Idaho, USA

3 posted 2001-06-20 06:14 PM

This is impressive! The surprise ending (at least to me) really gives one food for thought!

Betty Lou Hebert

Stephanos

Member Elite

since 2000-07-31

Posts 3618
Statesboro, GA, USA

4 posted 2001-06-21 11:35 PM

perfect poem for the thoughts you wanted to convey.

But I would still like to see something like this at the end...

"yet the good overcame the foul".

But maybe that thought (of grace finally winning out) is for another poem. Just a thought. I think your poem is great the way it is.

Stephen.

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