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Trillium 
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA 
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God must have had a lot of fun When creation was begun. As He designed each living form, Each seed and tuber, root and corm, Envisioning what it would be, From lichens to a giant tree. What joy to make the birds in air. Then watch them soar and flutter there, In colored feathers, every hue And some with special features too, Like irridescence, fans that fold, Glitter, plumes and flash of gold. The animals were sheer delight. Presenting such a diverse sight. With here a horn and there a spur. Sporting different kinds of fur. Some in stripes and some with manes. From the mountains to the plains, Each one has it's special worth And serves a purpose on the earth. The sea-life is perhaps most rare. Many millions teeming there. In shapes surprising, stunning too. What would we who live here do, Without the treasures of the sea? What a strange life it would be. When making mankkind, did he smile To think that in a little while, We'd fill the world with billions strong, Still struggling with right and wrong. Betty Lou Hebert Published in Lines and Rhymes, and The Sunflowers Dream, 1998 [This message has been edited by Trillium (edited 05-04-2001).] |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
Really does make one wonder if God cries seeing all the majesty He created taken for granted and being abused. This poem, like all of yours, is lovely. Thank you. Rae |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
This is lovely Betty. I am sure God had lots of fun as well as imagination in making all of the different forms. Joyce |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Wonderful Betty. So much fun to think of Him fashioning the earth and its inhabitants. A joy He had indeed and still does when a new one grows from precious seed. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I'd publish this too, if I had the chance.  However there are a few lines that defied the otherwise perfect meter, in my opinion. Next time you write something in this style, try to assure yourself that every line has enough of the right kinds of syllables.  Don't get me wrong, I thought this poem was magnificent. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
sandgrain, Joyce and VAS: Thanks to each of you for taking time to read and make nice comments. Allan: Which lines are you referring to? I'd like to know. Thanks. Betty Lou Hebert |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Splenderific poem! I'm sure He laughs, and then cries, bet He even wonders why. (sometimes) Great writing Betty! |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Well there were a few lines that were not written in Iambic Tetrameter, and those ones kind of threw off the flow for me. That's just a personal opinion of course. Iambic Tetrameter is just like Iambic Pentameter, only with four Iambic feet. You did it in most of the poem, I felt that it could have been drawn out into the rest as well. As I said, please don't get me wrong, I really enjoyed this poem, it was merely a suggestion. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
WhtDove: Thanks for your comments! Allen: Thank you for responding to my question and I always appreciate your remarks. Very informative. Betty Lou Hebert |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
Wonderful poem. Thanks for sharing a few of the wonders of GOD. I believe he has a reason for all of the diversity, but I can only wonder why. Melton |
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