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Allan Riverwood
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0 posted 2001-03-31 08:30 PM


My friend, I've seen you cry
in tears that fall for endless days
My friend, I've seen you die
I stand now, where your body lays
My friend, I heard the falling tear
That was the last, as God grew near


Recall Junior High
The taunts and accusations
The insults they threw
I'd always seen you alone
a friend, had you ever known?


My friend, I heard the falling tears
that washed the fear and pain away
you dropped your words upon deaf ears
I never knew quite why you'd pray
You had a friend, I must confess
for deaf ears were ears, nonetheless


Recall Camp Arnez
when you'd sit, beside the lake
talking to the sky
they pointed and laughed at you
what more were you left to do?


My friend, I saw you fight one time
you laid your hand upon my throat
My friend, you had avenged my crime
and in your eyes, I saw you gloat
My friend, that day the truth I saw
it made me stop and gape in awe


Recall just today
you held my hand, and you smiled
said your last few words
"you need not remember me
up in heaven, there I'll be"


My friend, I've seen you cry
in tears that fall for endless days
My friend, I've seen you die
I stand now, where your body lays
My friend, I heard the falling tear
That was the last, as God grew near


Now I feel alone
you and I were just the same
but far too different
I'm jealous, and also sad
you'd a friend I'd never had

[This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 03-31-2001).]

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Joyce Johnson
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1 posted 2001-03-31 08:49 PM


This is so poignant.  Very well done.  Joyce
ellie LeJeune
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2 posted 2001-03-31 10:11 PM


Allan; There is so much complexity and layers of meaning here, as life always is. Your poem, in it's beauty, says so many things of friendships hoped for and faith realized. You have a deep mind and a great spirit...a true seeker of wisdom and truth. Ellie

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

Songbird
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3 posted 2001-04-01 12:36 PM


This is awesome.. so deep and so full of meaning. You have wisdom beyond your years. I will be looking for more of your writing.
Lakewalker
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4 posted 2001-04-01 12:45 PM


Allan,
This is excellent man, thanks for sharing it.  Your words show many meanings to me.  This truly has me thinking.  Nice job.

"Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle"  
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sandgrain
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5 posted 2001-04-01 04:58 PM


This piece is awesome.  How many times have I been passive to one who desparately needed a friend, I wonder.  You are a friend, a Christian in action, and a great poet.  Thank you for sharing these great works of wisdom with us, Allan.
   Rae

Allan Riverwood
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6 posted 2001-04-01 05:02 PM


Thank you all for your praise.      It means a lot to me.
The form was something I'm playing a bit around with, that my friend Kevin used to do with Senryus... every other stanza was done in Tanka format.  
Rae- I am a poet, but not exactly a Christian.  Thank you for your words still.  
~Allan

The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further"

[This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 04-01-2001).]

WhtDove
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7 posted 2001-04-01 10:28 PM


Allan I don't know what to say. You've blown me away with this most excellent piece of writing!

I agree with all the above comments here. This is just some superb writing!  

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