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Jeen
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since 2000-06-07
Posts 91


0 posted 2000-06-10 02:56 PM



In the not so distant past,
just sixteen years ago;
God graced me with a child,
the most perfect gift I know.

A small infant boy,
with the tiniest, perfect hand;
that would be entrusted to me,
until he became a man.

I possesed no special abilities,
until his birth that day;
and with a new found mothers power,
I turned to God to pray.

Dear God, he's come to early,
please make him be alright.
Is there some special thing to do,
so he'll sleep straight through the night?

Oh, and God he doesn't feel well,
can you take away his cold?
Can you keep him healthy always;
or at least until he's old?

Please Lord, help me this time,
as I leave for work each day;
help him know that I do love him,
even though I am away.

While he's off in school God,
I am a working, single, mother;
protect him from the slings and arrows,
his parents often hurl at one another.

Let him know we both adore him,
even though we've made mistakes.
We were two imperfect people;
acting civil for his sake.

Father, help him to forgive me,
let my love for him outweigh;
all the sorrow I have caused him,
all the turmoil and dismay.

Now that he's a teen Lord,
teach him to be strong;
I can not find the words to use,
so we might get along.

At fourteen he is asking,
to live with his dad for good;
he tells me he still loves me,
but that I've misunderstood.

What he needs now is his father,
to help him become a man.
I must love him from the sidelines;
I must back off if I can.

God this is too much to handle!
How can I let him go?
I did not have time to teach him,
all the things that he should know.

Father help me to release him,
into your arms I pray;
and please keep him safe Oh Lord,
if he turns to walk astray.


God he is an honor student now,
and an athelete, I'm so proud;
of what use he has made,
with the gifts you have endowed.

In my daily job of praying,
may my thoughts and words convey;
a loving thankful heart for my son,
who you've cared for every day.

© Copyright 2000 Jeen - All Rights Reserved
ellie LeJeune
Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA
1 posted 2000-06-11 03:21 AM


Dear Jeen; Welcome here at Spiritual! I love your poem that is written so beautifully from a mothers heart. I'm a mom too, so I heard every struggle and pain and all the joy in every word. I'm looking forward to seeing more of your poetry here. Ellie

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WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
2 posted 2000-06-11 10:20 AM


WELCOME JEEN!

Ok, the title can be taken two ways here. First thought was that this is not your poem but something that touched you and you wanted to share? OR...that the child belonged to God?

If it's not yours, do you know the author?
If it is yours, I praise you for such beautiful writing.

Either way, I loved it, I'm glad it was shared with us!

Jeen
Member
since 2000-06-07
Posts 91

3 posted 2000-06-11 03:39 PM


Hello everyone.

Thank you for the supportive words.  I am grateful to now have a place to post my thoughts.  

I did author the poem. I chose the title when, as you wrote, I realized that my son is and always will be, God's child, not mine.

Since I am new to these forums, I am not sure how this works, although I did read the guidelines.  

I know nothing about formal poetry, and am attempting to learn now. Will people also be able to post suggestions here if something I write doesn't flow, or is wrong structurally?

Thank you again.
Jeen

[This message has been edited by Jeen (edited 06-11-2000).]

WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
4 posted 2000-06-11 06:39 PM


Hi Jeen! I'm glad to have you here as I'm sure everyone else is too! I'm glad you found us, and I'm sure you'll come to love it here.

There are 3 ways you can get help with your poetry.

1. We have a Critical Analysis forum here for just that. You just post in there and they can critique it. (Some find it hard to accept the critiquing in CA) But you can always try it out and see what you think. It has helped many people.

2. We also have a Poetry Workshop which will help you learn different forms and structures of poetry.

3. You can put in your heading/title (critiques welcome)

We're not formal here, and we all write from the heart. You'll find the best group of people right here in Passions.

Please feel free to read and respond to others as well, as that's how we all get to know each other. I hope you find a home here like the rest of us did. If you have any questions let me know. You can email me by clicking the link above, or where you see my post or replies, by clicking on the yellow envelope. If I can be of any assistance, I'm just an email away  


[This message has been edited by WhtDove (edited 06-11-2000).]

Alle'cram
Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816
Texas
5 posted 2000-06-12 11:37 AM


Welcome Jeen,
  What a wonderful poem about your son and your faith in God.  Looking forward to the next one.  Marcy

Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
6 posted 2000-06-12 12:24 PM


Hello Jeen!  Welcome [again] to Passions!  Whtdove has answered most of your questions, but if you are like a lot of us, the more you get "into" this place, the more questions you will have.  You can also get ahold of me via e-mail anytime you wish, and I will help you out in any way I can!

Enjoy your stay here, and in the other Forums!



 Sunshine

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~


Forrest Cain
Member
since 2000-04-21
Posts 306
Chas.,W.V. USA
7 posted 2000-06-16 07:29 PM


Hi Jeen I had commented on your poem earlier but got busted by the poet police. Gosh I hope I don`t have to serve time. Honest mistake. This forum is a wonderful place with lots of supportive feedback. Again
your poem was nicely done and having watched 4 children leave home can relate to the
statement from G.Khan that your children are not your own but rather life`s
longing for its self. (imperfect quote but that`s all I can remember.)

God Bless and Preserve
love forrest
tomorrow I will search med doc and
talk to our best pulmonolgist.

deleeme
Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766
NEW ENGLAND, USA
8 posted 2000-06-16 10:12 PM


Your poem is most beautiful, as from a true mother's heart--A lovely work, expressed well. We are happy that you have come our way- to share your own thoughts and uniqueness--and you will find us quite loving, supportive & addictive- if you stay with us long enough.  God Bless you and your Son,   David

 "GOD GIVES- but man must open his hand." (German Proverb)


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