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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA 
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The dark, dismal sky belched billious clouds of navy and black, that hovered over the crucifixion cross marked "King of Jews." Howling winds screeched gossipy gasps sulking-howling again as if bowing curtain calls. Demonic dice were cast, drunken men drooled, Mary wept softly, rising above the chanting of the calloused crowd echoes the auctioneer's plea, "What will you give for the Man of Calvary?" Silence fell as certain as a curtain ends a Shakespearian tragedy, but no one bid for the Auctioneer's Son. Piercing the silence came the cry "Why hast Thou forsaken me?" ...And, then in submission from the pale parched lips, "I commend my spirit to thee." Centuries passed...and one somber wintry evening I heard the Auctioneer's plea again "One thousand once...one thousand twice..." Penniless and penitent I raised my hand and cried out, "Love, Love!" And His Son was given to me. ------------------ ~*~ Time erases and rewrites all the lines. What remains is the poetry! ~*~ [This message has been edited by Echo Rhayne (edited 05-28-2000).] |
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deleeme Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766NEW ENGLAND, USA |
You have such a wonderful way of spinning your narrative poems, that I feel like I'm there observing, and learning, cringing & feeling that crying need of that deep Son myself. In my book, you've done very well my friend. Thank you ------------------ "Our Creativity points to a Higher Creator--we couldn't have just happened, and for what ability we may possess--to God be the glory." -dlw- |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Thank you David. That means a lot! ------------------ ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
You truly do have a gift Echo! I'm glad that you share it with us! What a blessing! |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
*blush* Remember what I told you though, the only thing I will admit I can do is draw  ------------------ ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Well then I'll just have to keep telling you until you believe it then! heheh...quite blushing now... |
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summer Member
since 1999-11-23
Posts 80long beach .ca.usa |
THIS ONE BRINGS TEARS. IT REMINDS ME OF THE DAY I RAISED MY HAND IN THAT LIFE SAVING AUCTION...THANK YOU FOR TOUCHING MY SPIRIT.. |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Rebecca...Don't waste your breath =o) Summer...Thank you, I am glad my words were able to touch you! It means a lot! ------------------ ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You write in such a way that the reader is drawn in. Your verse comes to life. Well done, Echo! ------------------ Denise |
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mirjam Member
since 1999-11-24
Posts 246Auckland, New Zealand |
wow i love the way you use your words Echo - they spiral around each other and you do this all within a narrative that paints a picture so vivid that you feel as though you are actually there experiencing the scene yourself! Definitely made me think of the day i asked the Lord into my life - very touching. Mirjam. |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Denise and Mirjam...Thank you, I like trying to be able to show others the exact feelings I felt, or to make people think about that exact moment in their life, or anything. It is far better than just reading a poem and not getting anything from it, I think! Though I have written MANY like that! I am glad ya'all enjoyed this one though, this particular poem means a lot to me! Thank you ------------------ ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Would you believe it if it came from me, Echo?, you truly do have a gift and we are all blessed to have you share it with us. Beautiful. Michael |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Sunshine, since my recent decision to not write any more poems, I brought this one back up for your challenge because it gives a picture of what it was like when I first accepted Christ. I sit and ponder and lift thoughts from my consciousness, spilling them forth to here, raising my lit cigarette and blowing smoke in the face of reality. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
You admit to drawing well, and you do, you draw faith and wonder and love very well wih your heart, the perfect sketching tool. Liz |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
(((((ECHO)))))); Where are you? What a privilege to read such a inspiring piece of work as I just read from you. I am deeply humbled from it and thank you for sharing your persoanl love for Jesus from your heart. Marcy |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Echo; This is a magnificent portrait painted by a master poetess! I felt like I was there with you, Echo. I hope you are enjoying your sabatical from poetry, but can't wait till you start painting with your pen once more. Ellie 02 |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Wow, a wonderful poem. I love the auction metaphor, powerful images as well... The dark, dismal sky belched billious clouds of navy and black, that hovered over the crucifixion cross marked "King of Jews." Howling winds screeched gossipy gasps sulking-howling again as if bowing curtain calls. Demonic dice were cast, drunken men drooled, Mary wept softly, rising above the chanting of the calloused crowd echoes the auctioneer's plea, "What will you give for the Man of Calvary?" Silence fell as certain as a curtain ends a Shakespearian tragedy, but no one bid for the Auctioneer's Son. ------------------------ "Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? " Douglas Adams. "Here chewing your tail is joy" Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Do not listen to a word I say Just listen to what I can keep silent" Nicky Wire |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Echo, how pleased I am to see you bring one of your treasures back up, perfectly suited for the challenge I put forth. I have watched your writing for some time now...and I am very pleased you thought I was worthy of your efforts...Thank you... Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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