Open Poetry #4 |
A Winter Night Remembered |
Lynn Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 316Jasper, Alabama U.S.A. |
A Winter Night Remembered I watched as winter came upon us, and the last rose petal fell. The harsh memories still haunt me of that night, a never ending hell. I tried to escape the madness, in the winter winds, so cold. But I found myself near freezing, with memories I'll always hold. Screams echoed through the icy trees of how I vowed to never let go. You swore to me that your love was true and you would let everyone know. I must have stood in the rain for hours, until it started to slowly freeze. My body was now entirely numb, shivering with every cooling breeze. You found my body that night, passed out and half way froze. How I survived that night is a miracle that nobody knows. But I believe I know the reason of just why I didn't die. Simply because I never had the chance to tell you good-bye. [This message has been edited by Lynn (edited 11-18-1999).] |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Wow - one powerful poem here! That first verse is great - the way you have mixed something as fragile as a rose petal with a night of living hell. Excellent words Lynn. |
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Lynn Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 316Jasper, Alabama U.S.A. |
Thanks Severn....It took a lot of time to write this, because of the situation. I' glad I did though. Thanks again. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is excellent, Lynn. Very powerful, indeed! ------------------ Denise |
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Lynn Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 316Jasper, Alabama U.S.A. |
Thanks very much Denise. ------------------ If time cannot heal your pain, you can always cry on my shoulder. ~Jenn~ |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
WOW! ------------------ Alis volat propriis (She flies with her own wings) |
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Betty Gravitt Member
since 1999-09-11
Posts 222Georgia United States |
Very beautiful. Thank you for shareing this with us. |
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Lynn Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 316Jasper, Alabama U.S.A. |
Hoot & Betty...Thank you both so much for the comments. ------------------ If time cannot heal your pain, you can always cry on my shoulder. ~Jenn~ |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is well written, Lynn. The images and combinations of ideas and intertwining of thoughts took work, I'm sure....and it was well worth it. |
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Lynn Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 316Jasper, Alabama U.S.A. |
Thanks Balladeer. It was actually from a semi-true event in my life. A time that I still think about very often, but wish I could forget. Sometimes it takes me a while to come up with something to write, but I have had many sleepless nights this past week, and this was the thought I had. I'm glad you liked it. ------------------ If time cannot heal your pain, you can always cry on my shoulder. ~Jenn~ |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Sadly beautiful Lynn....excellent writing...... ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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