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A Sea Of Boundless Love
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A Sea Of Boundless Love |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
A Sea Of Boundless Love You would have me dangle, waiting for your beckon call until you had some need of me to help you, lest you fall. You would have me standing, waiting for your next command. And never even notice if I offered you a hand. If I give you what you ask the value is denied. You say I gave you nothing, say I never even tried. So I am not surprised to find you think I let you down. For in a sea of boundless love, you can not swim. You drown. ------------------ Yesterday is history, tomorrow just a mystery. And if today is good to me how could I ask for more? |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Good poem Ohme and you are a good swimmer. |
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FreeByrd Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 267 |
Sounds like your good at treading water. Have you decided against being the Lifeguard anymore? -RS |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
Thanks, Martie. And yes, I think I am.  Thanks as well, RS. Yes, I had to give up the job as life guard. Letting someone drown does not look good on a resume either. LOL ------------------ Yesterday is history, tomorrow just a mystery. And if today is good to me how could I ask for more? |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I enjoyed this Ohme! Loved it! ------------------ Denise |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wow, I really enjoyed this. Well written. The last two lines are great although I might have worded them a bit differently, something like this: For in a sea of boundless love, if you can not swim; you drown. |
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Lynn Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 316Jasper, Alabama U.S.A. |
Ohme...I really liked this. ------------------ If time cannot heal your pain, you can always cry on my shoulder. ~Jenn~ |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
Denise, thanks for reading and replying. Glad you liked it. Hoot, ooooh, I like your version better. Thanks for the suggestion. Lynn, Thanks for reading and replying. ------------------ Yesterday is history, tomorrow just a mystery. And if today is good to me how could I ask for more? |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Great piece Ohme! Really enjoyed .... ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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debbiemac Junior Member
since 1999-11-19
Posts 19Lodi, CA USA |
I have always been a believer of "What you put into life is what you get out of it" and one's actions come back around three fold whether good or bad. I am glad to see your eyes are wide open to being taken for granted. Wish you the best. Great poem!! ------------------ Debbie |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
I thought this was wonderful, OhMe. I've always been one ready to throw the lifeline ... and sometimes it landed in shallow water. GLUB ! GLUB ! GLUB ! ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Ohme this was fantastic, and related with me well! |
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