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Broken.......( comments welcome)
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Broken.......( comments welcome) |
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Moonshine Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265Australia |
This is something I just wrote. It's not a very good piece but I thought that I would post it anyway. BROKEN: You shoved yourself inside of me Forcing yourself all the way in I tried to fight but you were too strong The pain was unbearable - burning, ripping my skin You pounded yourself into me Slamming my body into the ground I tried to fight you and I tried to scream But all that came out was a small whimpering sound You grunted and moaned as you took your pleasure from me Tasting tears that stung as they fell down my cheeks My body hurt all over from what you had done I prayed that death would set me free You pounded yourself harder into me Slamming my broken body into the earth Then inside of me you emptied your bitter seed Nothing my life now was worth With cold eyes you stared at me As I pulled my torn pants back on and wiped away dirt and blood You told me not to tell anyone Inside my soul was dead. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This is so sad and tragic  ------------------ Alis volat propriis (She flies with her own wings) |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
I can only pray this is not from experience and if it is..I am truly sorry. This was a very disturbing read but also very well written. ------------------ Once I was brilliant, now I no longer shine, but the twinkle in my eye speaks of another time. |
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Moonshine Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265Australia |
Dear Hoot_owl_rn, I'm sorry, I should have probably posted this piece in dark passions. I wrote it last night and just posted it in here, didn't even think of posting it in there. |
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Moonshine Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265Australia |
Dear RSEvans, Thanx for your comment and encouragement. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Moonshine...there isn't anything in it that prevents it from being posted here. Having been there, that type of thing hits hard with me. I only hope you don't speak from experience, but with the strength of your words, my mind tells me otherwise. No one should have to go through this. Know my thoughts are with you. Hugs  Ruth ------------------ Alis volat propriis (She flies with her own wings) |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
I have never experienced this tragidy (ThankGod!!). I do however feel all of the pain and anger from this piece. I am sorry if this is a true life experience. I wish I knew how to help. |
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Julie Senior Member
since 1999-08-20
Posts 739Houston, TX |
This piece was indeed tragic and if from experience I hope you didn't let him walk away free of consequences. ------------------ Julie ------------------------- Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss it, you will land among the stars.~Les Brown~ |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
This is tragic and heartbreaking Moonshine. I have no words of wisdom to comfort you with my dear....so I can only offer hugs... I wish you peace of heart and closure to this horror..... ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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Moonshine Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265Australia |
Thankyou for your kind words Ruth, Poetry is how I get my feelings out. I hope this poem did not upset you. |
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Moonshine Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265Australia |
Thanx Marilyn, For your kind words and encouragement. |
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Moonshine Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265Australia |
Thanx for your comment Julie, I was young at the time, I walked away with the consequences cause that's all I could do. |
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Moonshine Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265Australia |
Dear Pepper, Thanx for your lovely comment and encouragement and also for your kind words. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Moonshine,I too feel all the pain and anger from this poem,Please know that I am here for you anytime ok HoneyBee. (((((HUGS))))) ------------------ What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Moonshine Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265Australia |
Thanx DA, You're such a sweet person, that really means a lot to me. |
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