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Spirit's Song
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Spirit's Song |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704
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ravages my every step I stare upon a sunset and feel live colors flow through my veins as blood I walk barefoot among grains of sand and exhale them as my breath I know no quiet this world is loud even in silence still Where then lies my peace? Who can calm the raging storms of my mind every thought alive and sense too strong for rest I feel dangerous alone unsafe yet free this tasting of the earth's life leads to risk and calls so mighty but I am small lost amid those with deadened eyes misunderstood and needing constant thrill Who then can help me sleep yet touch the color of the sunset there with me and vision the reins of control as thin slices of a floating cloud? Who possesses such mix of fire and cool? Is this just... a spirit's song? KM 17.11.11 ------------------ ...the shells upon the warm sands have taken from their own lands the echo of their story...Enya |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Severn...this is stunning...beautiful, full of depth and longing. Brava, my friend!! Most excellent!  ------------------ Time's fun when you're having flies~~Kermit the Frog |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Caroline - you have produced a big smile on my face and I was literally bouncing on my chair! (I had to stop to type this...) Thankyou!!!!! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Severn this is exquisite. Sooooo beautiful! Well done! ------------------ Denise |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wonderful words from a wonderful person |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Severn, this is truly an exquisite piece. Lovely, beautiful work. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "To be great is to be misunderstood...." - Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Severn ... your spirit moves me. This is just the 'most'. ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Denise - thanks.Ruth - that is such a lovely thing to say! Alwye - thankyou...a for you too.Marge - a spirit is sometimes closer to us than our actuality I think. Now is such a time. Thanks my friend. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
My friend, you seem to have a thing for the DNA helix. ------------------ Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© ------------------------------------------------------- "Either kill me or take me as I am, because I'll be damned if I ever change..." Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade (Marquis de Sade) |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Firstly, love the title. And anything to do with one's spirit is always a winner in my book!! Bravo my friend ------------------ Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing... ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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FreeByrd Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 267 |
Gotta take the risk's to get the thrill Nice work Who possesses such mix of fire and cool? You can... my friend -RS  ------------------ [This message has been edited by FreeByrd (edited 11-18-1999).] |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Very beautiful and heartfelt piece, my dear. I too, have been there...walking in the sand as you spoke of - and as someone said, "Silence can be loud.".....when you're deep in thought and emotion, it almost always is. Stand strong, and breathe in life for what it's worth. I have faith in you. ------------------ ~~ Lift your head high - spread your "words" and fly - - poetFemmeFatale |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Severn, You have openned the door to your feelings and it is a wonderous place. Well done. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I was so moved by this poem. You are only dangerous if you don't exhale the feelings that fill you up. Your spirit song is what will give you peace. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
My friends... Dream - LOL - I thought that as I centred this and just KNEW you would comment!! Thanks for the smile. Isis - blushing here. Thankyou! Freebyrd - yes, that is what I have learned - rather quickly!! (Love that username by the way) Dear pFF - thankyou. Faith in myself right now is rather difficult - and I do know you have been there. Hugs to you dear friend. Sy - that is so sweet! Martie - alas - I truly find peace hard to attain - but there is a certain amount here, in my second home. Thanks - |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Peace is a difficult journey my friend. (Supportive hugs right back atcha.) Taking the time to walk and think, scream your head off at the sky, kick the lamp posts and trash cans (careful that can hurt...ouch!). Talking with your friend and airing your soul is the path to attaining the peace you seek. I am still travelling that path myself but have attained more then I have known in many years. You are on the right track, continue to believe in yourself. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Severn, these are top quality thoughts produced in a top quality style. My congratulations on this excellent achievement. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Marilyn - you are a fount of good advice my friend! Thankyou... Ballader - wow. More blushing! Thankyou. |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
Beautiful "spirit's song" indeed Severn..! Enjoyed much.. ------------------ "No one was ever ruined from without; The final ruin comes from within.".....Amelia E. Barr |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
I'm glad I didn't miss this Severn. Truly an exqusite piece!! ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Rarely is it that I ditto anyone! But I will here all of them. Excellent depth, feeling and all! Very GOOD! |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Severn: If it's just a spirit talking, then I have to wonder who talks on behalf of me, I think you do! HUSG ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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mirjam Member
since 1999-11-24
Posts 246Auckland, New Zealand |
Well if 21 replies doesn't just say something about this poem in itself i don't know what does. Severn each and every poem of yours i read touch my spirit. You have really opened yours up here and i almost feel as though i'm looking inside. Just the image of you doing exactly what marge said expresses the emotions you are feeling, and i do hope you find that peace in a world full of noise - keep searching you will find it. Loved this poem sweetie. |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
And the reward is worth the risk! Reward yourself! |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
Well done!..beautiful words..your ability to project your emotions into your visual imagery here is wonderful...I hope that you find the peace you are longing for |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Severn You've stopped my pen from rhyming, and rhythm,for you've captured here the rhythm of life and that my friend, not any poet could do, Just beautiful Elizabeth |
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