Open Poetry #4 |
dont really like this but i told myself id spit someting out and here it is |
Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
fingers dance across the keys to enchantning melodies that only fall on poets ears, singing of love, hopes, and fears. the poet asks not of this sense just ponders writing in years hence. for living in a world so vast poetic fingers cant dance too fast. |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is wonderful, Kevin! Keep spittin'em out! ------------------ Denise |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
Well, this is music to my ears...er eyes. It's lovely. What don't you like about it???? |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Hey, you can spit them out like that anyday |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
Kevin, what did ya not like? It's music to my ears as well. If this is a prelude go spit some more out! ------------------ Yesterday is history, tomorrow just a mystery. And if today is good to me how could I ask for more? |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kevin, I guess Hoot said it. You spit pretty good. |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
thanks guys i really didnt like it because of the tempo and rythm were all off but i guess its growing on me =) |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Well Kevin, Ya puked enuff, Cuz your spittin up Is so much Better than my thought out stuff. So keep up the spit, And aim it straight, Cuz compared to this, My "crap's second rate! [This message has been edited by Toerag (edited 11-16-1999).] |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
almost didn't read cause of the title lol, but glad I did, this is nice |
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