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Open Poetry #4

Soul on Ice ( part 1)

Nate Dogg
Senior Member

since 1999-11-15

Posts 1658
Georgia, Fulton

0 posted 1999-11-15 03:04 PM

As I continue to stand on this ledge,
I continue to loose my edge,
with my soul,
because, it has gotten out of control.
Once upon a time,
I was a guu with a stress-free mind
but, now I lash out at people like an angry canine.
Origin: God created man
and man crated politics.
I declined to participate in it
until I was orientated.
I heard 20,000 drivebies
and only 199 was lies.
No surprise,
as crimes constantly rise,
thine has seen the end
of a chance for a peaceful world to begin.
In the heat of debate,
my emotions ramble like an earthquake.
I concede to say that,
I will never find,
my own piece of mind
in this crazy world,
if I continue to act blind.
But in a sudden display of rage
I say: Give me 40,000 black angry role models,
take me to D.C. and I'll throw the first f---ing bottle.
I say this because,
I'm sick of all the disadvantages,
I get for living in these circumstances.
My civil rights,
I sacrifice.
In the name of Jesus Christ,
they got my soul on ice.

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Nathan

JOY 14
Senior Member

since 1999-09-22

Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA

1 posted 1999-11-15 07:02 PM

So much emotion and anger? fustration? All put into a poem that clearly expresses it.

Systematic Decay
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

2 posted 1999-11-15 08:12 PM

#1, may I ask why you said "Black" angry role models? why specifically black (I hope that didn't sound predjudiced)

#2, Rioting will only result in a decrease of rights and enforcement against problems...it is not the way to go.

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Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.

[This message has been edited by Systematic Decay (edited 11-15-1999).]

Denise

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

3 posted 1999-11-15 09:51 PM

The frustration and pain are very clear in this piece. Writing can be a great help for that. I know it helps me. Welcome to Passions, Nathan.

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Denise

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