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Rod
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since 1999-12-08

Posts 149
Auckland New Zealand

0 posted 1999-12-27 05:08 AM

The Confines of the Mind

What predatory forces find
The fissured confines of the mind !
Where gnarled hobgoblin’s sharpened pick
With sins long past, does conscience prick.

In inglenooks with balustrades
Where ghosts sip tainted lemonades;
With poisoned darts they irk and needle,
Spook and startle, twist and wheedle.

Oh! How those visions, dark and ghoulish
Haunt the wakes of actions foolish.
Wherein black spectres of regret
In wraith-like form, their vengeance get.

They feed on notions of the lustful
Drink betrayal’s wine distrustful,
Yet unassuaged, their appetites
Will prey in dark, tormenting nights.

For none escape their gruesome hand;
Reality’s no perfect land.
Its battleground, in truth must lie
In human mind..... not earth or sky.

How certain he must end in tears
Who takes no counsel of the years;
Nor heeds the words of sages past
Who fathomed how man’s die was cast.

So bitter come the tempter’s thanks
For those who dwell within his ranks
In selfish quest, for their tomorrow
Comes in darkness....... draped with sorrow.

©1999 Rod Walford

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

1 posted 1999-12-27 06:48 AM

Rod
This is exceptionally well written, as all of your work is... I particularly like the stanza

quote:

How certain he must end in tears
Who takes no counsel of the years;
Nor heeds the words of sages past
Who fathomed how man’s die was cast.

Nice job, my friend...

If you'd like it moved to OP#5, email me..
Nancy

[This message has been edited by Nan (edited 12-27-1999).]

Dr.Moose1
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since 1999-09-05

Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA

2 posted 1999-12-27 10:57 AM

A masterful piece , exceptionally well written.

Coegwyr
Junior Member

since 1999-12-20

Posts 35

3 posted 1999-12-27 05:57 PM

Superb writing Rod, I have been impressed by your talent since you started posting, the way you use words and make the lines flow so easily makes each poem a joy to read. This has to be my favorite so far, although the quality in all your poems makes it very hard to choose.

Well done.

( OK I admit it ‘STORM’ is my favorite, I’m a sucker for a shaggy dog tale )

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

4 posted 1999-12-27 09:56 PM

This is fantastic, Rod! Wonderful! Keep 'em comin'!

Denise

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

5 posted 1999-12-28 05:26 AM

Keep 'em coming indeed!

sandgrain
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since 1999-09-21

Posts 3662
Sycamore, IL, USA

6 posted 2000-01-01 03:39 PM

Oh, how I love your subject matter as well as your most talented writing! You certainly have a great way with well chosen words. Thanks

John Foulstone
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since 2000-01-01

Posts 100
Australia

7 posted 2000-01-02 09:21 AM

Always a real treat to read something with
such meticulous attention to structure, and
the rhymes are excellent.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
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8 posted 2005-04-15 03:01 AM

awesome piece!

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

9 posted 2007-11-12 04:12 PM

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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